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1、GREPracticeTest1WritingResponsesGRADUATE RECORD EXAMINATIONSPractice General Test #1Analytical Writing Sample Essays and CommentariesCopyright 2010 by Educational Testing Service. All rights reserved. ETS, the ETS logo, GRADUATE RECORD EXAMINATIONS, and GRE are registered trademarks of Educational T

2、esting Service (ETS) in the United Statesand other countries.Revised GRE Practice Test 1. Analytical Writing Sample Essays with Commentaries.Information for screen reader users:This document has been created to be accessible to individuals who use screen readers. You may wish to consult the manual o

3、r help system for your screen reader to learn how best to take advantage of the features implemented in this document. Please consult the separate document, ScreenReaderIntro.doc, for important details.The Analytical Writing portion of the GRE consists of two writing topics, an Issue topic and an Ar

4、gument topic.Analyze an IssueSample Issue Topic DirectionsDirections: The Analytical Writing portion of the GRE consists of two writing topics: Analyze an Issue and Analyze an Argument. For this section, Analyze an Issue will be the writing topic.You will be given a brief quotation that states or im

5、plies an issue of general interest and specific instructions on how to respond to that issue. Plan and compose a response in which you develop a position on the issue according to the specific instructions. A response to any other issue will receive a score of zero. Standard timing for an issue topi

6、c is 30 minutes.Make sure that you respond to the specific instructions and support your position on the issue with reasons and examples drawn from such areas as your reading, experience, observations, and/or academic studies.Trained GRE readers will read your response and evaluate its overall quali

7、ty according to how well you do each of the following: Respond to the specific instructions on the issue Consider the complexities of the issue Organize, develop, and express your ideas Support your position with relevant reasons and/or examples Control the elements of standard written EnglishBefore

8、 you begin writing, you may want to think for a few minutes about the issue and the instructions and then plan your response. Be sure to develop your position fully and organize it coherently, but leave time to reread what you have written and make any revisions you think are necessary.Sample Issue

9、Topic:The best ideas arise from a passionate interest in commonplace things.Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement above and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement mig

10、ht or might not hold true and explain how those considerations shape your position. The following are sample responses and commentary on those responses, which explain how the response was scored. There are responses and scoring comments for essays with scores of 6, 5, 4, 3, 2, and 1.Note: Sample re

11、sponses are reproduced exactly as written, including misspellings, wrong choice of words, typographical and grammatical errors, etc., if any. The following sample issue response received a score of 6:Passion is clearly necessary for a truly great idea to take hold among a peoplepassion either on the

12、 part of the original thinker, the audience, or ideally both. The claim that the most lucrative subject matter for inspiring great ideas is “commonplace things” may seem initially to be counterintuitive. After all, arent great ideas usually marked by their extraordinary character? While this is true

13、, their extraordinary character is as often as not directly derived from their insight into things that had theretofore gone unquestioned. While great ideas certainly can arise through seemingly pure innovation . . . say, for example, Big Bang cosmology, which developed nearly all of its own scienti

14、fic and philosophical precepts through its own process of formation, it is nevertheless equally true that such groundbreaking thought was, and is, still largely a reevaluation of previous assumptions to a radical degree . . . after all, the question of the ultimate nature of the universe, and mans p

15、lace in it, has been central to human thought since the dawn of time. Commonplace things are, additionally, necessary as material for the generation of “the best ideas” since certainly the success among an audience must be considered in evaluating the significance and quality of an idea. The advent

16、of Big Bang cosmology, which occured in rudimentary form almost immediately upon Edwin Hubbles first observations at the Hooker telescope in California during the early 20th century, was the most significant advance in mankinds understanding of the universe in over 400 years. The seemingly simple fa

17、ct that everything in the universe, on the very large scale, is moving away from everything else in fact betrays nearly all of our scientific knowledge of the origins and mechanics of the universe. This slight, one might even say commonplace, distortion of tint on a handful of photographic plates ca

18、rried with it the greatest challenge to Mans general, often religiously reinforced, conception of the nature of the world to an extent not seen since the days of Galileo. Not even Charles Darwins theory, though it created more of a stir than Big Bang cosmology, had such shattering implications for o

19、ur conceptions of the nature of our reality. Yet it is not significant because it introduced the question of the nature of what lies beyond Mans grasp. A tremendous number of megalithic ruins, including the Pyramids both of Mexico and Egypt, Stonehenge, and others, indicate that this question has be

20、en foremost on humankinds collective mind since time immemorial. Big Bang cosmology is so incredibly significant in this line of reasoning exactly because of the degree to which it changed the direction of this generally held, constantly pondered, and very ancient train of thought. Additionally, the

21、re is a diachronic significance to the advent of Big Bang cosmology, which is that, disregarding limitations such as the quality of optical devices available and the state of theoretical math, it could have happened at any point in time. That is to say, all evidence points to roughly the same raw in

22、tellectual capacity for homo sapiens throughout our history, our progress has merely depended upon the degree of it that a person happens to inherit, a pace that has been increasing rapidly since the industrial revolution. Yet this discovery had to happen at a certain point in time or anotherit cann

23、ot have been happening constantly or have never happened yet still be presentand this point in time does have its own significance. That significance is precisely the fact that the aforementioned advent must have occurred at precisely the point in time at which it truly could have occuredthat is to

24、say, it marks the point in our history when we had progressed sufficiently to begin examining, with remarkable substantiated acuity, the workings of the universe across distances that would take millions of human lifetimes to reach or to traverse. The point for the success of this advent must necess

25、arily have been, additionally, the point at which the audience concerned was capable and prepared to accept such a radical line of reasoning. Both factors, a radical, passionate interpretation of the commonplace and the preparedness to accept such an interpretation, are necessary for the formulation

26、 of a truly great idea. If the passion is absent from an inquiry by the thinker or by the bulk of an audience, the idea will die out if it comes to fruition at all. If the material is not sufficiently commonplace to be considered by an informed audience of sufficient size, the same two hazards exist

27、. Given these two factors, the idea must still be found palatable and interesting by the audience if it is to hope to gain a foothold and eventually establish itself in a significant fashion. Comments on sample essay receiving score of 6: This outstanding response presents a cogent, well-articulated

28、 analysis of the complexities of the issue by arguing that (1) great ideas develop from commonplace observations that are interpreted in a radical way; and (2) passion is required of both thinkers and the audience in order for great ideas to take hold. The argument is based on an extended example (B

29、ig Bang cosmology) and has two parts. The first part defines “commonplace things” as universal questions (i.e., the quest to understand the cosmos is commonplace, though complex, because it is an ancient and universal question) and places Big Bang cosmology in context with the scientific breakthroug

30、hs of Galileo and the Pyramids of ancient Mexico and Egypt. The second part explains Big Bang as the result of a convergence of factors: both thinkers and the audience must be ready to reevaluate “previous assumptions” and accept “radical, passionate interpretations.” The arguments careful line of r

31、easoning is strengthened by appropriate transitions between paragraphs (“Additionally,” “Both factors, a radical, passionate interpretation of the commonplace and the preparedness to accept such an interpretation, are necessary for the formulation of a truly great idea,” etc.) and within paragraphs

32、(“Not even Charles Darwins,” “Yet,” “that is to say,” etc.). Fluent and precise languageadvent, rudimentary, diachronic, shattering implications, megalithic ruinsand effective sentence variety also characterize this response as outstanding. Finally, despite the presence of minor errors (overuse of comma and inconsistent use of ellipses in paragraph 1), this response demonstrates facility with the conventions of standard written English.The following sample issue response received a score of 5:The statement above comes from the perspective that the best thinkers, inventors, an