浙江省高考英语第三部分写作导练案第二讲读后续写练习.docx

1、浙江省高考英语第三部分写作导练案第二讲读后续写练习第二讲读后续写李仕才典例展示(2017浙江6月高考)阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。On a bright，warm July afternoon，Mac Hollan，a primary school teacher，was cycling from his home to Alaska with his friendsOne of his friends had stopped to make a bicycle repair，but they had encouraged Mac to carry on，and

2、 they would catch up with him soon.As Mac pedaled(骑行)along alone，he thought fondly of his wife and two young daughters at homeHe hoped to show them this beautiful place someday.Then Mac heard quick and loud breathing behind him.“Man，thats a big dog！”he thought.But when he looked to the side，he saw i

3、nstantly that it wasnt a dog at all，but a wolf，quickly catching up with him.Macs heart jumpedHe found out his can of bear spray.With one hand on the bars，he fired the spray at the wolf.A bright red cloud enveloped the animal，and to Macs relief，it fell back，shaking its head.But a minute later，it was

4、by his side again.Then it attacked the back of Macs bike，tearing open his tent bag.He fired at the wolf a second time，and again，it fell back only to quickly restart the chase(追赶)Mac was pedaling hard now.He waved and yelled at passing cars but was careful not to slow down.He saw a steep uphill climb

5、 before him.He knew that once he hit the hill，hed be easy caught up and the wolfs teeth would be tearing into his flesh.At this moment，Paul and Becky were driving their car on their way to Alaska.They didnt think much of it when they saw two cyclists repairing their bike on the side of the road.A bi

6、t later，they spotted what they，too，assumed was a dog running alongside a man on a bike.As they got closer，they realized that the dog was a wolf.Mac heard a large vehicle behind him.He pulled in front of it as the wolf was catching up fast，just a dozen yards away now.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2应使用5个以上短文中标

7、有下划线的关键词语；3续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1：The car abruptly stopped in front of him.Paragraph 2：A few minutes later，the other two cyclists arrived.思路导航一、审题体裁记叙文人称第三人称时态一般过去时所标出的关键词语表人物的有：Mac，Paul，friends表事物的有：home，wolf，bicycle，cars表动作的有：jumped，pedaled，climb前文大意Mac与好友一起骑行去阿拉斯

8、加，路上同伴因修自行车落后，Mac独自一人前行，遇到狼的突袭，于是他拼命逃，却得不到援助。这时，一辆车停在了他前面二、抓住段首句设问续写段首1：The car abruptly stopped in front of him.设问：Why did it stop? How did Mac feel? What would Mac/Paul do？.续写段首2：A few minutes later，the other two cyclists arrived.设问：After they arrived，what did they see? How did they feel? What wou

9、ld they do？.三、谋篇(1)续写材料第一段所给的首句是The car abruptly stopped in front of him.，在行文过程中应抓住关键词语the car stopped，再发挥丰富的想象，把Paul停车后如何在千钧一发之际拯救Mac的过程写得趣味横生又合乎情理。(2)第二段所给的首句是A few minutes later，the other two cyclists arrived.，起承上启下的作用。朋友到达之后看到、听到并做了什么。最后应该提炼思想性和体现价值观的传递正能量的元素(如珍爱生命，学会合作或感激等)，以提升文章的档次。(3)在续写时，除了注

10、意原文给出的关键词语，还需要注意以下线索：Why did the wolf chase Mac? What did Paul see when driving the car on the way to Alaska? He pulled in front of it as the wolf was catching up fast，just a dozen yards away now.Why did he stop the car?(4)在确定了思路和内容之后，续写时，要注意句子结构的多样性，语言的丰富性，并通过句与句之间连接词的正确使用，使上下文连贯。【参考范文】Paragraph 1：

11、The car abruptly stopped in front of him.Paul rolled down the window and yelled，“Man，get in the car！” Without any hesitation，Mac jumped off the bicycle and dashed into the back seat of the car.At the same time，the wolf caught up.Luckily，the cars door was firm enough to stop the wolf.However，they cou

12、ldnt just stay there.Because the wolf was under the protection of the law，they couldnt kill it.So Paul pressed the button of the horn to make an alert.Finally，the wolf left and disappeared.Paragraph 2：A few minutes later，the other two cyclists arrived.They were shocked to see that Macs tent bag was

13、in poor condition.And they were even more shocked to hear that he met a wolf.After a short rest，Mac was much better.So they thanked Paul and Beeky and decided to continue pedaling to Alaska.Time flew; the sun was hiding its last gold like a miser.Though tired，Mac thought of his wife and lovely child

14、ren again.He had such a horrible but exciting experience to share!技法指导一、续写策略1读后续写不是随心所欲地写，而是要在所给段落开头和所标示关键词的帮助下完成续写部分(150词左右)。其中，段落开头语与传统写作中的开头语类似，在某种程度上引导你的思路向哪方面发展，所续写部分不能脱离各自的段落开头语另起炉灶，要在其基础上进行拓展发挥。2续写所给语言材料多是记叙文之故事类文章，情节曲折跌宕，线索性和逻辑性较强。考生要抓住故事的叙事线索，依据原文的写作思路续写文章，并适当发散。3读后续写要求读写并重，需要考生对给定材料精确理解，这样

15、所续写部分才不至于偏离主题，就这方面而言，读后续写有点类似阅读理解题中对文章后续发展的推断，如：What would happen next?4续写部分的思路和内容并不一定是唯一的，考生可根据自己对上文材料的理解，对文章的结尾做出不同的诠释。二、续写步骤1精读文章，确定文章线索。每篇文章都有各自独特的写作思路。通过精读文章，找到该篇文章的写作线索，如是以时间为线索还是以空间为线索等，这样有利于考生“顺藤摸瓜(结尾)”。2仔细审题，明确续写要求。3回扣原文，揣摩续写思路。根据文章后面的要求，再次快速回读短文，抓住文章的思路，结合续写段段首的提示语，最终确定续写段落的思路，同时结合文章中标有下划线

16、的关键词语，确定续写段落的内容。4拟定草稿，修改错词病句。5标出续写部分中使用到的原材料中标有下划线的关键词语(5个以上)。三、续写方法1精读所给语言材料，理清文章脉络并明确作者的论点，确定文章主旨。2寻求前文与续写段段首句之间的内在联系，站在作者的角度，设计并发展情节，想象要合理，情节要连贯。3后续情节一般为故事的高潮或延续，是原作者声音的延续、态度的延伸，因此，要尽量符合原文思路，并求得与读者的心理共鸣，让读者回味无穷。4续写时心态要端正，所续写内容要积极、健康向上，把事物美好的一面展示出来。5利用自己已有的知识和经验，在继承原作者风格和语言基础之上，准确、地道地表达，充分展示语言的表现力

17、。提高关联词与过渡语的使用率，增强整句表现力。6如果所给短文为议论文，那么议论文中的段落首句多为主题句，观点鲜明。续写时，要围绕段落分论点确定论证方法，如正反对比、例证等。四、注意事项1词数要求：词数少于130的，从总分中减去2分。2与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度。3内容的丰富性和对所标出关键词语的应用。4应用语言结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性。5上下文的连贯性。实战演练阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。When I was eleven years old，I had a big accident.I get scared even now when I think

18、about that time.I went_skating near my house.There were many people，and I saw some of them falling on the ice.It was my first time to go ice skating，so I was nervous.I was wondering how to skate.I went with a friend who was very skillfulHe spent some time teaching me how to skate，but I didnt learn m

19、uch.He left me and skated all around.As soon as he left，I fell_downI envied the other people because they could skate_wellI was bored because I kept falling so I took off my skates and just walked around on the ice in my shoes.It was cold and my hands were frozen.Suddenly，I stepped on something that

20、 was not hard.What was it? It was a weak place in the ice.When I stepped there，I sank under the ice.I thought that I was going to die，but I did my best to grab something to get out from under the ice.I tried to grab the edge of the ice，but it was very difficult for an elevenyearold.It seemed like a

21、very long time，like a year.Then，fortunately，someone helped me.He grabbed my arms and pulled me up.So，I lived and Im still alive today.I thanked him.At that time，my friend came back.I was annoyed at him because he was supposed to take_care_of_me，but he didnt.He was embarrassed.When I took a taxi home

22、，the taxi driver was surprised and asked what had happened.I didnt want to say anything because I was tired and scaredEven now，whenever_I_think_about that time，I feel uncomfortable.I dont want to go skating again even now.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4续写完成后，请用下划线标

23、出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1：It was long before I went skating once again，Paragraph 2：However，ever since then I havent found any time to go skating，思路导航思路点拨本文讲述了作者11岁去滑冰的一段经历，由于自己的滑冰技能不如别人娴熟，因而独自一人尝试练习总会跌跌撞撞，从而对滑冰这件事留下了不好的印象。由续写第一段的提示语“It was long before I went skating once again(很久以后我才又一次去滑冰)”可知，这一次去滑冰，作

24、者会抱着不一样的态度。那么首先得明确一点，对于这次滑冰，一定要有一个妥当的理由，不然作者自己是不会去的。显然，作者已不在是当时那个自己，他以前就不是特别擅长滑冰，因此他此次不会像当时那样独自一人去练习，而是极有可能同别人一起去的。与上一次的经历相比，这一次不会进展得特别顺利，但是起码有所进步，毕竟一次学好很难。那么，写作时宜注意练习滑冰以及有人陪同指导滑冰的细节问题。同时，在作者的心理活动方面，也是与过去滑冰时的心情有所变化的，那应是一个起伏的过程，此处对作者心情的描述可以客观中性些，对滑冰的恐惧情绪的描述则相对减弱些。由续写第二段的提示语“However，ever since then I

25、havent found any time to go skating”可知，作者以后抽不出时间滑冰了，那么这一段应写一下作者为什么抽不出时间去滑冰的原因了，毋庸置疑，这势必与作者工作或家庭上的繁琐事情有关。换句话说，作者随着年龄的增长，找工作、结婚、抚养孩子等都有可能成为作者忙碌的理由。除此以外，随着时间的流逝，作者对滑冰的经历必然是有感悟的，那么就需要增加一些作者对过去或者未来的想法。最后，可尝试与前面的内容有所呼应。续写词汇已给提示词汇：went skating，skillful，fell down，skate well，fortunately，take care of me，scare

26、d，whenever I think about可能用到的词汇：advise，decide，follow ones advice，patiently，grateful，careful，lose heart，failure，face bravely【参考范文1】Paragraph 1：It was long before I went skating once again, and that was when we graduated from the university.Our monitor advised us all to go skating，and I decided to fol

27、low his advice although I still felt a little scaredSoon we were active on the ice.One of my roommates was very skillful and she patiently explained to me how to start.Step by step，I was able to stand up on the ice myself and headed out a little，not so steadily and I fell_down many times.I was grate

28、ful to her for I managed to skate that day，though I couldnt be like others，who could skate_wellI had a nice time that day!Paragraph 2：However，ever since then I havent found any time to go skating, because immediately I dived into the applying for the suitable jobs.And then，fortunately，I met my honey

29、 and got married.As was expected，one baby came into the world and was now smiling to me every day.As for the skating，maybe I could be on the ice again when my baby is grown up and asks me one hundred times!【参考范文2】Paragraph 1：It was long before I went skating once again, accompanied by one of my frie

30、nds.This time I was careful and cautious，and my friend took_special_care_of_meI was so fortunate this time that I managed not to fall_downGradually I learned to skate_well and became skillfulI felt very confident and no longer scaredParagraph 2：However，ever since then I havent found any time to go skating, not because I do not want to go_skating，but because I am too busy working.