1、话题爸爸带儿子去朋友家农场游玩迷路的故事和父母一块去旅游的故事和朋友一起骑车游玩,野外遇狼的故事小两口野外露营,因小事发生争执,女主人独自走进森林迷路,在野外独自过夜的故事所给文章长度320338344332标示词名词(词组)78动词(词组)23形容词、副词1分析解读1.考查方式提供一段350词以内的语言材料,要求考生依据该材料内容和所给段落开头语进行续写(150词左右),将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。2.考查能力读后续写主要考查学生以下四个方面的能力:宏观把控语篇结构的能力:学生需要掌握上下文逻辑关系,所续写的短文与所给短文及段落开头语之间要有连贯性,所续写的短文
2、语句要连贯、有序。熟练准确运用语言的能力:学生能准确、恰当地使用所学词汇和语言结构,还能够根据内容需要使用较多较复杂的词汇和语言结构,使语言表达丰富而又有感染力。把握故事情节和语言特点的能力:学生需要了解所给短文的主要内容,并通过续写短文表现出来。进行创造性思维的能力:学生所续写的短文要具有较丰富的内容,包含详细和生动的情景、态度和感情描述。【真题探秘】真题再现One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfo
3、rtunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom, “Im going to find a better spot for us to camp”and walked away.With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had
4、climbed to a high place, she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost.“Tom!”she cried.“Help!”No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane ke
5、pt moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.Jane ros
6、e at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling(滴落)somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great joy,she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now,
7、Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake.As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that for me?Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Ja
8、ne took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again.Paragraph 1:But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.Paragraph 2:It was daybreak when Jane woke up.阅读点拨这是一篇情节自然,但是有冒险色彩的故事。原文讲到Tom 和Jane 因琐事吵 架,后来Jane意外迷失在森林里。根据原文及所给的段首
9、句,续写部分的构思不会太难。 根据第一段的首句可知,本段应该描述当天晚上Jane的心态和行动。而根据第二段的提示 句可知,本段主要叙述Jane最终是如何获救的。当然,在续写中,一定要反映出Jane的坚韧和聪明,同时,最后一定要有Tom努力救援的信息,这样的续写故事结尾才有正能量。本文的矛盾冲突为 Jane 在森林中迷失这个问题,表现的是人与环境之间的冲突。故事情节围绕该矛盾冲突展开。问题的产生(在森林迷路)问题如何解决(试图走出森林,试图向直升机求救)问题的解决(获救) 该矛盾冲突推动了故事情节的发展,依照Before getting lostWhile getting lostAfter g
10、etting lost 这一时间线索串联出文章的叙事逻辑主线。其中,After getting lost 为文章的重点展开部分。流程详解1.梳理记叙要素,归纳文本大意whoJane, TomwhatJane was lostwherein the forestwhenone weekend in Julywhya quarrel with Tom, her husband主旨大意Jane was lost in the forest and survived in the end.2.厘清叙事情节,助推故事高潮叙事情节beginning.started to quarrel.was lostd
11、evelopment.kept moving.had to stop for the night.rose at the break of day.began to walk along the stream and hope.climaxheard a helicopterending待续助推高潮增加障碍让直升飞机发现Jane的困难营造冲突扩大Jane在夜晚内心的冲突(后悔与丈夫吵架)渲染Jane当晚与次日与环境之间的冲突(当晚“恶劣”的环境与内心无助和恐惧的冲突;次日让直升飞机发现自己的困难与渴望被救的冲突)3.研读段落开头语,精准定位续写方向研读续写段落的开头语Para. 1But no
12、 more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.How did Jane feel then?How did Jane struggle through the night?Did she fall asleep and what did she think of?Para. 2It was daybreak when Jane woke up.Was Jane rescued and who rescued Jane?How was she rescued and how did she feel then?续写内容Paragraph
13、 1Jane是如何熬过那一个夜晚的(所听、所思、所感)Paragraph 2Jane是如何获救的(所行、所听、所见、所感)4.添加细节描写,凸显人物情感Jane的所听(frightening sound)、所思(regret)、所感(frightened and tired).Jane如何被直升飞机发现和与丈夫重逢后的喜悦5.恰当使用连接词和过渡语,使全文流畅连贯在续写的过程中我们可以根据情节和逻辑的需要选用but/however、although/though、unfortunately、instead、on the contrary、whats worse、worse still、so、t
14、hus、therefore、consequently、as a result等连接词使上下文衔接紧密、表意连贯。6.检查“个人佳作”,检查故事情节是否连贯,语法、词汇运用是否准确参考范文【五档作文】But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. She had to stay alone in the forest for another cold night. Jane was so tired and disappointed, but she didnt lose heart. She knew Tom must b
15、e trying his best to search for her. She believed that the helicopter must have been called by Tom and was sure it would come back again tomorrow. She found a place near the stream and slept.It was daybreak when Jane woke up. She walked along the stream, hoping to find a suitable place so that the h
16、elicopter could find her. She was so lucky that before long a big rock appeared, which was high above the trees. There she climbed and waited with her yellow blouse in hand for the helicopter to come again.To her great joy,she didnt wait long before she saw the helicopter in the sky. She waved hard
17、with the yellow blouse and the helicopter quickly found her. She was right and it was Tom who called the helicopter and saved her. 【满分作文】But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. In the dreadful darkness, Jane heard strange sounds of wild beasts clearly, feeling extremely frightene
18、d. “If I hadnt quarreled with Tom, I wouldnt be trapped here now,” she thought to herself regretfully with tears clouding her eyes. Surrounded by fear, Jane felt worn out and finally fell asleep. “Tom, is that you?”she murmured. “Tom, help!” In her dream, she saw a man extending his arms towards her
19、 at a distance.It was daybreak when Jane woke up. Jane decided to continue forcing her way ahead. In the boundless search, she found it hard to find a way out, which threw her into desperation. Fortunately, a helicopter flew overhead just at that moment. In no time did Jane rush to the rock and clim
20、b onto it eagerly. She waved her yellow blouse madly to the helicopter. To her great joy, the helicopter spotted her and came to her help. The moment Jane and Tom reunited, they hugged each other tightly in the warm light of the setting sun.【五年高考】Writing 1(2018浙江6月)阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。It w
21、as summer, and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before. He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West.We took a plane to Albuquerque, a big city in the state of New Mexico. We reached Albuquerque in the late afternoon. Uncle Paul, my dads friend, picked us up from the airport an
22、d drove us up to his farm in Pecos.His wife Tina cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle. My dad and I spent the night in the guest room of the farm house listening to the frogs and water rolling down the river nearby. Very early in the morning, Uncle Paul woke us up t
23、o have breakfast.“The day starts at dawn on my farm,”he said. After breakfast, I went to help Aunt Tina feed the chickens, while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take the sheep out to graze(吃草).I was impressed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding horses. They looked really cool.In the afternoon, I aske
24、d Uncle Paul if I could take a horse ride, and he said yes, as long as my dad went with me. I wasnt going to take a horse ride by myself anyway. So, my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats, got on our horses, and headed slowly towards the mountains. “Dont be late for supper,”Uncle Paul cried,“and ke
25、ep to the track so that you dont get lost!”“OK!”my dad cried back. After a while Uncle Paul and his farm house were out of sight. It was so peaceful and quiet and the colors of the brown rocks, the deep green pine trees, and the late afternoon sun mixed to create a magic scene. It looked like a beau
26、tiful woven(编织的)blanket spread out upon the ground just for us.注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.We had no idea where we were and it got dark.答案One possible version:Suddenly a little rab
27、bit jumped out in front of my horse. This unexpected appearance frightened my horse, which made it run wildly. I tried my best to control it, but in vain. Frightened as I was, I tried to keep my balance to prevent myself from falling off. Fortunately, minutes later, the horse stopped before a river,
28、 out of breath, and so did I. At that moment, my dad also came up. Seeing I was OK, he was quite relieved. But it was clear that we got lost.We had no idea where we were and it got dark. We didnt know where the farm house was. What we could do was to go back along the previous track slowly. But it w
29、as really difficult for us in such a dark situation. Just as we were at the point of desperation, we heard a faint voice from the distance. “It must be Uncle Paul,” I said. So we cried back with excitement. Finally, Uncle Paul safely brought us back home. What an amazing ride!Writing 2(2017浙江11月)A V
30、acation with My MotherI had an interesting childhood. It was filled with surprises and amusements, all because of my motherloving, sweet, yet absent-minded and forgetful. One strange family trip we took when I was eleven tells a lot about her.My two sets of grandparents lived in Colorado and North Dakota, and my parents decided to spend a few weeks driving to those states and seeing all the sights along the way. As the first day of our trip approached, David, my eight-year-old brother, and I unwillingly said good-bye to all of our friends. Who knew if wed ever see
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