专题十 读后续写试题部分.docx

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专题十读后续写试题部分

专题十　读后续写

【考情探究】

考点

所给信息特点

浙江考情分析

2019.6

2018.11

2018.06

2017.11

2017.06

2016.10

读

后

续

写

体裁

故事类记叙文

话题

爸爸带儿子去朋友家农场游玩迷路的故事

和父母一块去旅游的故事

和朋友一起骑车游玩,野外遇狼的故事

小两口野外露营,因小事发生争执,女主人独自走进森林迷路,在野外独自过夜的故事

所给文章长度

320

338

344

332

标

示

词

名词（词组）

7

7

7

8

动词（词组）

2

0

3

2

形容词、副词

1

3

0

0

分析解读

1.考查方式

提供一段350词以内的语言材料,要求考生依据该材料内容和所给段落开头语进行续写（150词左右）,将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。

2.考查能力

读后续写主要考查学生以下四个方面的能力:

①宏观把控语篇结构的能力:

学生需要掌握上下文逻辑关系,所续写的短文与所给短文及段落开头语之间要有连贯性,所续写的短文语句要连贯、有序。

②熟练准确运用语言的能力:

学生能准确、恰当地使用所学词汇和语言结构,还能够根据内容需要使用较多较复杂的词汇和语言结构,使语言表达丰富而又有感染力。

③把握故事情节和语言特点的能力:

学生需要了解所给短文的主要内容,并通过续写短文表现出来。

④进行创造性思维的能力:

学生所续写的短文要具有较丰富的内容,包含详细和生动的情景、态度和感情描述。

【真题探秘】

真题再现

　　OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,“I'mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”andwalkedaway.

Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.

“Tom!

”shecried.“Help!

”

Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.

　　Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling（滴落）somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.

Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?

Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.

Paragraph1:

Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain. 

Paragraph2:

ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup. 

阅读点拨

这是一篇情节自然,但是有冒险色彩的故事。

原文讲到Tom和Jane因琐事吵架,后来Jane意外迷失在森林里。

根据原文及所给的段首句,续写部分的构思不会太难。

根据第一段的首句可知,本段应该描述当天晚上Jane的心态和行动。

而根据第二段的提示句可知,本段主要叙述Jane最终是如何获救的。

当然,在续写中,一定要反映出Jane的坚韧和聪明,同时,最后一定要有Tom努力救援的信息,这样的续写故事结尾才有正能量。

本文的矛盾冲突为Jane在森林中迷失这个问题,表现的是人与环境之间的冲突。

故事情节围绕该矛盾冲突展开。

问题的产生（在森林迷路）

问题如何解决（试图走出森林,试图向直升机求救）

问题的解决（获救）

该矛盾冲突推动了故事情节的发展,依照

Beforegettinglost

Whilegettinglost

Aftergettinglost

这一时间线索串联出文章的叙事逻辑主线。

其中,Aftergettinglost为文章的重点展开部分。

流程详解

1.梳理记叙要素,归纳文本大意

who

Jane,Tom

what

Janewaslost

where

intheforest

when

oneweekendinJuly

why

aquarrelwithTom,herhusband

主旨大意

Janewaslostintheforestandsurvivedintheend.

2.厘清叙事情节,助推故事高潮

叙事情节

beginning

...startedtoquarrel...waslost

development

...keptmoving...hadtostopforthenight...roseatthebreakofday...begantowalkalongthestreamandhope...

climax

heardahelicopter

ending

待续

助推高潮

增加障碍

让直升飞机发现Jane的困难

营造冲突

①扩大Jane在夜晚内心的冲突（后悔与丈夫吵架）

②渲染Jane当晚与次日与环境之间的冲突（当晚“恶劣”的环境与内心无助和恐惧的冲突;次日让直升飞机发现自己的困难与渴望被救的冲突）

3.研读段落开头语,精准定位续写方向

研读续写段落的开头语

Para.1

Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.

①HowdidJanefeelthen?

②HowdidJanestrugglethroughthenight?

③Didshefallasleepandwhatdidshethinkof?

Para.2

ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.

①WasJanerescuedandwhorescuedJane?

②Howwassherescuedandhowdidshefeelthen?

续写内容

Paragraph1

Jane是如何熬过那一个夜晚的（所听、所思、所感）

Paragraph2

Jane是如何获救的（所行、所听、所见、所感）

4.添加细节描写,凸显人物情感

Paragraph1

Jane的所听（frighteningsound）、所思（regret）、所感（frightenedandtired）...

Paragraph2

Jane如何被直升飞机发现和与丈夫重逢后的喜悦……

5.恰当使用连接词和过渡语,使全文流畅连贯

在续写的过程中我们可以根据情节和逻辑的需要选用but/however、although/though、unfortunately、instead、onthecontrary、what'sworse、worsestill、so、thus、therefore、consequently、asaresult等连接词使上下文衔接紧密、表意连贯。

6.检查“个人佳作”,检查故事情节是否连贯,语法、词汇运用是否准确

参考范文

【五档作文】

Paragraph1:

Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Shehadtostayaloneintheforestforanothercoldnight.Janewassotiredanddisappointed,butshedidn'tloseheart.SheknewTommustbetryinghisbesttosearchforher.ShebelievedthatthehelicoptermusthavebeencalledbyTomandwassureitwouldcomebackagaintomorrow.Shefoundaplacenearthestreamandslept.

Paragraph2:

ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Shewalkedalongthestream,hopingtofindasuitableplacesothatthehelicoptercouldfindher.Shewassoluckythatbeforelongabigrockappeared,whichwashighabovethetrees.Theresheclimbedandwaitedwithheryellowblouseinhandforthehelicoptertocomeagain.Tohergreatjoy,shedidn'twaitlongbeforeshesawthehelicopterinthesky.Shewavedhardwiththeyellowblouseandthehelicopterquicklyfoundher.ShewasrightanditwasTomwhocalledthehelicopterandsavedher.

【满分作文】

Paragraph1:

Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Inthedreadfuldarkness,Janeheardstrangesoundsofwildbeastsclearly,feelingextremelyfrightened.“IfIhadn'tquarreledwithTom,Iwouldn'tbetrappedherenow,”shethoughttoherselfregretfullywithtearscloudinghereyes.Surroundedbyfear,Janefeltwornoutandfinallyfellasleep.“Tom,isthatyou?

”shemurmured.“Tom,help!

”Inherdream,shesawamanextendinghisarmstowardsheratadistance.

Paragraph2:

【五年高考】

Writing1（2018浙江6月）

阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。

Itwassummer,andmydadwantedtotreatmetoavacationlikeneverbefore.HedecidedtotakemeonatriptotheWildWest.

WetookaplanetoAlbuquerque,abigcityinthestateofNewMexico.WereachedAlbuquerqueinthelateafternoon.UnclePaul,mydad'sfriend,pickedusupfromtheairportanddroveusuptohisfarminPecos. 

HiswifeTinacookedusadeliciousdinnerandwegottoknowhissonsRyanandKyle.MydadandIspentthenightintheguestroomofthefarmhouselisteningtothefrogsandwaterrollingdowntherivernearby.Veryearlyinthemorning,UnclePaulwokeusuptohavebreakfast.“Thedaystartsatdawnonmyfarm,”hesaid.Afterbreakfast,IwenttohelpAuntTinafeedthechickens,whilemydadwentwithUnclePaultotakethesheepouttograze（吃草）.IwasimpressedtoseemydadandUnclePaulridinghorses.Theylookedreallycool. 

Intheafternoon,IaskedUnclePaulifIcouldtakeahorseride,andhesaidyes,aslongasmydadwentwithme.Iwasn'tgoingtotakeahorseridebymyselfanyway.So,mydadandIputonournewcowboyhats,gotonourhorses,andheadedslowlytowardsthemountains.“Don'tbelateforsupper,”UnclePaulcried,“andkeeptothetracksothatyoudon'tgetlost!

”“OK!

”mydadcriedback.AfterawhileUnclePaulandhisfarmhousewereoutofsight.Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetrees,andthelateafternoonsunmixedtocreateamagicscene.Itlookedlikeabeautifulwoven（编织的）blanketspreadoutuponthegroundjustforus. 

注意:

1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;

2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;

3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;

4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。

Paragraph1:

Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse. 

Paragraph2:

Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark. 

答案

Onepossibleversion:

Paragraph1:

Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.Thisunexpectedappearancefrightenedmyhorse,whichmadeitrunwildly.Itriedmybesttocontrolit,butinvain.FrightenedasIwas,Itriedtokeepmybalancetopreventmyselffromfallingoff.Fortunately,minuteslater,thehorsestoppedbeforeariver,outofbreath,andsodidI.Atthatmoment,mydadalsocameup.SeeingIwasOK,hewasquiterelieved.Butitwasclearthatwegotlost. 

Paragraph2:

Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.Wedidn'tknowwherethefarmhousewas.Whatwecoulddowastogobackalongtheprevioustrackslowly.Butitwasreallydifficultforusinsuchadarksituation.Justaswewereatthepointofdesperation,weheardafaintvoicefromthedistance.“ItmustbeUnclePaul,”Isaid.Sowecriedbackwithexcitement.Finally,UnclePaulsafelybroughtusbackhome.Whatanamazingride!

Writing2（2017浙江11月）

阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。

AVacationwithMyMother

Ihadaninterestingchildhood.Itwasfilledwithsurprisesandamusements,allbecauseofmymother—loving,sweet,yetabsent-mindedandforgetful.OnestrangefamilytripwetookwhenIwaseleventellsalotabouther.

MytwosetsofgrandparentslivedinColoradoandNorthDakota,andmyparentsdecidedtospendafewweeksdrivingtothosestatesandseeingallthesightsalongtheway.Asthefirstdayofourtripapproached,David,myeight-year-oldbrother,andIunwillinglysaidgood-byetoallofourfriends.Whoknewifwe'deverseethemagain?

Finally,themomentofourdeparturearrived,andweloadedsuitcases,books,games,campingequipment,andatentintothecarandbravelydroveoff.Webravelydroveoffagaintwohourslaterafterwe'dreturnedhometogetthepurseandtraveler'schecksMomhadforgotten.

DavidandIwerealwaysalittlenervouswhenusinggasstationbathroomsifMomwasdrivingwhileDadslept:

“Youstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookout（放哨）whileIgo,andI'llstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookoutwhileyougo.”Ihadterr