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Whatmakesagoodpassage尉惠玲WhatWhatmakesagoodpassage?

1.Beautifulhandwriting2.Beautifullanguage（correctspelling,grammarandpunctuation）3.Usageofcomplicatedoradvancedwordsandsentencepatterns1.4.Well-organizedstructureofanarticle（Includingallthepointsrequired）5.Usageofconnectingwords,suchasadverbs,orconjunctions外在美一篇优秀的书面表达首先是一件艺术品。

书写清楚，字母大小匀称，单词间距适当，使人赏心悦目。

词汇美Group11.Theworkishard/difficultforus.Theworkchallengesus.2.In2015Chinamadegreatcontributionstoprotectingtheenvironment.2015saw/witnessedChinasgreatcontributionstoprotectingtheenvironment.3.Ihavenomoney（cantafford）tobuyit.4.Finallyhesaw（caughtsightof）theyoungmanslightovercoatinthedistance.5.Wehadbetteruse（makeuseof）somethinginexpensive.6.Theproductsareverygood（ofhighquality）andaresoldeverywhereinChina.7.Wealllivein（share）oneandthesameplanet.8.Wecanlookat（view）theprobleminmanyways.9.Jackisveryclever.Heoftenthinksof（comesupwith/putforward）newideas.Group21.Asastudent,Iamstronglyfortheactivitybecauseitisverymeaningfulandhelpful.2.Theactivity,whichisintendedtopromotefriendshipandencourageeconomy,ishighlypraisedandsupportedbytheteachersandstudentsinourschool.3.Thestrongwindblewandtheyellowleavesfellonthegroundhereandthere.4.BothyouandIhavechangedalotinthepast20years.5.Thesituationlookeddesperate,buttheydidntgiveuphope.6.Onlyinthiswaycanyouhopetomakeimprovementsintheoperatingsystem.7.Shoulditraintomorrow,wewouldntgoswimmingintheriver.8.Itwaswhattheheadmastersaidatthemeetingthatreallysurprisedus.9.Anawfulaccidentdid,however,occurtheotherday.10.Sheisunwillingtotellmewhatitisthatistroublingher.11.Thefootballmatch（being）over,crowdsofpeoplepouredouttothestreet.12.Allthepeopleinvitedtothepartyareyoungscientists13.IdpreferitifIdidnthavetodosomuchwork.14.Ithinkitshightimethatshemadeuphermind.1.WhatdoyouthinkofBeijing?

HowdoesBeijingstrike/impressyou？

2.Otherwise,youreffortswillhavenoresultsOtherwise,youreffortswillmakenosense.3.Whilecrossingtheroad,youmustbecareful.Whilecrossingtheroad,youcantbetoocareful.4.Aftermanyattempts,theplanetookoffAftermanyattempts,theplanemanagedtotakeoff.句式美5.NeverdoeshespeakNeverdoeshespeakabouthisownfamily.6.Lastyearthefactoryproducedtwiceasmanycarsasitdiddidtheyearbefore.7.Somestudentsthinkwhileothersarguesothersargues8.RomewasnotbuiltinonedayRomewasnotbuiltinoneday.9.AllworkandnoplaymakesJackadullboyAllworkandnoplaymakesJackadullboy.10.HewhodoesntreachtheGreatWallisnotatrueman.HewhodoesntreachtheGreatWallisnotatrueman.Group21.Jimdidntpasstheexam.Itsurprisedeverybody.Jimdidntpasstheexam,whichsurprisedeverybody.WhatsurprisedeverybodywasthatJimdidntpasstheexam.ItwassurprisingthatJimdidntpasstheexam.2.Shewasveryhappyandshebegantoprepareforthetrip.Shewassohappythatshebegantoprepareforthetrip.3.Hetriedveryhardbuthecouldntopenthedoor.Tryashemight,hecouldntopenthedoor.4.KangjieMiddleSchoolwasfoundedin1945anditswell-knowninShanxiProvince,eveninChina.Foundedin1945,KangjieMiddleSchooliswell-knowninShanxiProvince,eveninChina.5.Ihurriedtothestationbuttheytoldmethetrainhadleft.Ihurriedtothestationonlytobetoldthetrainhadleft.6.Ifweatherpermits,wewillhaveapicnic.Weatherpermitting,wewillhaveapicnic.7.Wereturnedhome,weweretiredbutwerealsohappyWereturnedhome,tiredbuthappy.8.Becausemanyeyeswerefixedonme,Iwasnervous.Withmanyeyesfixedonme,Iwasnervous.9.Weweregladtoseecropsandvegetablesgrowingwell.Howgladweweretoseecropsandvegetablesgrowingwell!

10.Wedidntfindthecorrectwayuntildark.Itwasnotuntildarkthatwefoundthecorrectway.Notuntildarkdidwefindthecorrectway.11.Whenweclimbedtowardsthetop,wefoundtheviewmorewonderful.Thehigherweclimbedthemountain,themorewonderfultheviewwas.结构美合理的段落层次，条理清晰1.开头引人入胜。

2.中间内容充实饱满。

3.结尾干净利落。

假如你是李华，美国一所友好学校准备与你们学校共同创办一份中学生英文刊物，该校格林先生来信询问有关情况。

请你给她写封回信，主要内容如下：

1.表示赞成。

2.提出你喜欢的栏目。

3.简要说明理由。

注意：

1.词数100左右。

2.新的开头和结尾已为你写好。

3.适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

4.参考栏目：

栏目columnDearMr.Green,Iamveryexcitedtolearnthatwearegoingtostartamagazinetogether.Thatsoundsgreat!

AndIdefinitelyagreewithyouonthat.Someofthecolumnswhichyoumentionedintheletterarereallymycupoftea.Say,“cultureexpress”givesusabetterunderstandingoftheworld.Sincepeoplefromdifferentpartsoftheworldhavedifferentvalues,itsnecessarytolearnfromeachother.Thiswillofferawonderfulchance.Apartfromthat,“blurtout”isprettygoodforChinesestudentstolearnEnglishidiomsandimproveoralEnglish.Lastbutnotleast,“entertainment”issocool!

Thepopularsingers,actorsandcelebritiesaresocatchyandattractivethatyouabsolutelycantmissit!

Teenagersarejustfondofthetrendythings.Well,Icantlistmore.Ireallycantwaittoreadthatmagazine!

Yoursfaithfully,LiHua衔接美作文中的连贯表达作文中的连贯表达MakeCoherence引出话题tobeginwithtostartwithgenerallyspeakingasweallknowasisknownasaruleinonesopinionitisknowntoallthat.asthesayinggoes补充说明补充说明whatsmore,besides,moreover,furthermore,also,inaddition,inadditionto,apartfromaswellas,similarly表示转折意义表示转折意义but,however,yet,instead,insteadof,ratherthanonthecontrary,incontrastnevertheless,otherwise,though,although,despite,inspiteofevenif/though,exceptfor/that,afterallwhile,whereas陈述个人观点inmyviewinmyopinionpersonallyasforme,astomeasfarasImconcernedasfarasIknow表表示因果关系：

示因果关系：

因为，因此，因为，因此，所以所以sinceassothusbecause（of）therefore,consequentlyasaresult（of）,asaconsequencesothat,sothat,such,thatdueto,thanksto表表示条件关系：

示条件关系：

如果，只要如果，只要if,unlessas/solongasonconditionthatsuppose/supposingthatproviding/providedthat表示时间关系：

当表示时间关系：

当时候，不久，自从，等等时候，不久，自从，等等whenwhileafterbeforeuntilassoonaslaterafterwardssoonlatelyrecentlysincefromthenonfromnowonimmediatelyinstantlythemoment/theminutenosooner.than/hardly.whenit时间段时间段.since/before表表示特定的顺序示特定的顺序关系关系aboveallfirstofallfirstly（first）second（secondly）nextthenintheendfinallylastlylastbutnotleaston（the）onehandontheotherhandforonethingforanother表示举例、表示举例、说明说明forexampleforinstancetakeforexamplelikesuchasinotherwords,thatistosay用于陈述和强调事实用于陈述和强调事实：

实：

实际上，跟你说际上，跟你说实话实话actuallyasamatteroffacttotellyouthetruthinrealityinfact;indeedinparticular,especiallynamely表表并列关系并列关系or,and,also,too,aswellnotonlybutalso,aswellasbothand,eitheror,neithernor表比较表比较similarly,besimilartoincontrast,comparedwith/tojustlike,justasinthesamewaythesameas表目的表目的forthisreason,forthispurpose,sothat,inorderto/thatsoasto表示情感态度toonesamusement/annoyance/astonishment/relief/disappointment/displeasure/happiness/horror/joy/puzzlement/regret/sorrow/surprise/satisfaction表示强调indeed,aboveall,especially,themostimportantofall,certainly,infact,surely,nodoubt,withoutanydoubt,truly,atleast,obviously,atthemost,motatall,whatonearth/intheworld,afterall,makesure,whateverthecost表表总结、总结、归纳归纳inaword,inshort,inbriefinconclusion,allinall,onthewholegenerallyspeaking,inmyopinion,asfarasIknow,asweallknow,tosumupinsummarypractice根据中文意思，将下列英文句子补充完整。

根据中文意思，将下列英文句子补充完整。

1.你给了我许多帮助，也给了我许多鼓舞。

总之，没有你我不能成功。

Yougavememuchhelpandencouragement._,Icouldnthavesucceededwithoutyou.Inaword2.总的说来，你的回答不太令人满意。

总的说来，你的回答不太令人满意。

___,youranswerisnotsosatisfying.3.一般说来物理比数学难学得多。

一般说来物理比数学难学得多。

__,physicsismuchmoredifficultthanmathematics.AllinallGenerallyspeaking4.令我满意的是，他数学考试得了满分。

令我满意的是，他数学考试得了满分。

___,hegotfullmarksinthemathematicsexam.5.这辆自行车真的很漂亮，然而我没钱买。

这辆自行车真的很漂亮，然而我没钱买。

Thisbikeisreallyverybeautiful._,Ihavenomoneytobuyit.TomysatisfactionNevertheless6.令我高兴的是，我终于说服她改变了主意。

_.Ifinallypersuadedhertochangehermind.7.一开始他反对我的计划一开始他反对我的计划,但最后他支持我的计划了。

但最后他支持我的计划了。

Atfirsthewasagainstmyplan,but___hewasforit.Tomyjoyintheend8.Idonottrustthem._,theyarelazy,_theyareunreliable.我不相信他们我不相信他们,一方面是他们懒惰，另一方面是他们不可信。

一方面是他们懒惰，另一方面是他们不可信。

9.Certaintextbooksareinshortsupply;_Frenchdictionariesareurgentlyneeded.某些教科书供应缺乏，尤其是法语某些教科书供应缺乏，尤其是法语词典。

词典。

10.Idontwanttoseehimagain,hesgotnomanneranddoesntknowhowtodressproperly.__,mymotherdoesntlikehim!

我不想再见到他，他没风度，不知怎么得体着装。

再有就是我妈我不想再见到他，他没风度，不知怎么得体着装。

再有就是我妈也不喜欢他！

也不喜欢他！

ForonethingforanotherinparticularWhatsmore11.Mikeishardworking,cheerful,and_honest.Mike勤勤奋，活泼，最重要的是忠实。

奋，活泼，最重要的是忠实。

12.Theytoldmeitwouldbecheapbut_itcostmenearly$500.他他们告诉我这便宜，但事实上它花了我们告诉我这便宜，但事实上它花了我500500美金。

美金。

aboveallinfact13.Maryislookingafterhersisterschildren_herown.玛丽在照看她妹妹的孩子，也照看他自己的孩子。

玛丽在照看她妹妹的孩子，也照看他自己的孩子。

14.Theplanisnotwell-designed,_,itwouldhavebeentooexpensive.这个计划设计的不好，再说花费也太大。

这个计划设计的不好，再说花费也太大。

15.Idliketoeatout,but_Ishouldbetryingtosavemoney.我也喜欢出去就餐，可是另一方面我还得设法省我也喜欢出去就餐，可是另一方面我还得设法省钱哪。

钱哪。

inadditiontomoreoverontheotherhand16.TheLondonMarathonisadifficultrace._,thousandsofrunnersparticipateeveryyear.伦敦马拉伦敦马拉松是一种艰难的长跑竞赛，然而每年有成千上万的选手参松是一种艰难的长跑竞赛，然而每年有成千上万的选手参加。

加。

17.Myremarkwasintendedtocomfortherbut_itupsetherevenmore.我的话就是想安慰她，结果反而更让她不安了。

我的话就是想安慰她，结果反而更让她不安了。

18.Itwasntagoodthing;_itwasahugemistake.这不是什么好事，相反是大错。

这不是什么好事，相反是大错。

insteadonthecontraryNevertheless行文逻辑训练行文逻辑训练阅读短文，选择适当的过渡性词汇填空。

first,whatsworse,inmyopinion,besides,now_1_manymiddleschoolstudentsarefatandtherearereasonsforit.Someeattoomuchmeatandtoomanysnacks.Somesittoolongbutseldomexercise.Gettingfathasquiteafewdisadvantages._2_,beingfatmakesitdifficultforonetowalkormoveasothers.NowFirst_3_,tobefatusuallymeanstobeweak,anditiseasyforafatpersontosufferfrommanykindsofdiseases.Atthesametime.Afatpersongetstiredeasily,whichdecreaseshisstudyefficiency._4_,tobefatisnotagoodthingforusmiddlestudents.Weshouldtrytoeatlessmeatbutmorevegetables._5_weshouldtryourbesttotakepartinallkindsofsports.Ifso,wearesuretoloseweightandstayhealthy.WhatsmoreInmyopinionBesidesRewriteIwilltellyouthechangeofmylife.