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2021年八省联考高考英语读后续写真题及范文赏析
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Duringthispastyear,I'vehadthreeinstancesofcartrouble.Eachtimethesethingshappened,Iwassickofthewaymostpeoplehadn'tbotheredtohelp.Oneofthosetimes,IwasonthesideoftheroadforclosetothreehourswithmybigJeep.Iputsignsinthewindows,bigsignsthatsaidNEEDAJACK（千斤顶）,andofferedmoney.Nothing.RightasIwasabouttogiveup,aMexicanfamilyinasmalltruckpulledover,andthefather
boundedout.
Hesizedupthesituationandcalledforhisdaughter,whospokeEnglish.HeconveyedthroughherthathehadajackbutthatitwastoosmallfortheJeep,sowewouldneedsomethingtosupportit.Thenhegotasaw（锯子）fromthetruckandcutasectionoutofabiglogonthesideoftheroad.Werolleditoverandputhisjackontop,andwewereinbusiness.
Istartedtakingthewheeloff,andthen,ifyoucanbelieveit,Ibrokehistireiron.Noworries:
Hehandedittohiswife,andshewasgoneinaflashdowntheroadtobuyanewtireiron.Shewasbackin15minutes.Wefinishedthejob,andIwasaveryhappyman.
Thetwoofusweredirtyandsweaty.Hiswifepreparedapotofwaterforustowashourhands.Itriedtoputa
$20billintheman'shand,buthewouldn'ttakeit,soinsteadIwentuptothetruckandgaveittohiswifeasquietlyasIcould.Iaskedthelittlegirlwheretheylived.Mexico,shesaid.TheywereinOregonsoMommyandDaddycouldworkonafruitfarmforthenextfewweeks.Thentheywouldgohome.
注意：
1.续写词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
WhenIwasabouttosaygoodbye,thegirlaskedifI'dhadlunch.
Aftertheyleft,IgotintomyJeepandopenedthepaperbag.
【点评】 本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了去年作者汽车出现了三次故障，大多数人都懒得帮忙，作者对此感到很心厌。
有一次，他的汽车又出故障了。
他在路边求助了接近3个小时，但是没有人停下来帮忙。
就在打算放弃的时候，一个过路的墨西哥家庭停下来，提供了帮助。
从第1段续写的首句内容“就在我要说再见的时候，女孩问我是否吃过午饭了。
”可知第一段可描写作者和墨西哥家庭一块儿吃午饭的过程。
第二段首句内容“在他们离开后，我上了吉普车，打开纸袋。
”显然，第二段描写作者在这一家人离开后，在纸袋里发现什么，以及自己的感受。
两段续写线索是“吃午餐——交流——感谢——回家——发现东西——感悟”。
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按照原文及故事发展逻辑，纸袋里的东西包括作者悄悄放给这个家庭的主妇的20美元，既然这点是共性的，那么就得努力在“感悟”方面写出彩。
李琳老师的两篇下水文语言表达流畅、地道，第1段主人公受邀与墨西哥家庭共进午餐的动作细节描写生动，角色对话浅显，符合人物身份与语言交际习惯。
第2段着重描述主人公的感悟：
将乐助精神以自身行动传递。
高阶版以一哲言结束全文，发人深思，又回味无穷，这恰恰是新课标所要求的学生思维品质核心素养的生动展现。
细细品味李琳老师的两篇下水文，可以感悟通过英语写作教学为载体，如何指导学生将语言知识转换为语言能力，如何培养及传递积极的文化意识和高阶思维品质，如何提高语言学习能力，那么我们的学生的英语学科核心素养就可以落地培养。
范文赏析
1.第一段：
WhenIwasabouttosaygoodbye,thegirlaskedifI'dhadlunch.NotuntilthendidIhearmystomachrumbling.（句式：
倒装。
同时用到拟声词rumble说明我饿了，不直接说hungry）Ishruggedawkwardly.（很短的一个动作，shrug，表示我的尴尬）Asmileofsympathyflickeringacrossherface,shesuddenlyturnedaroundanddartedtowardhertruck.（小女孩的同情，加上动作链来突出女孩的热情）Forsplit
seconds,thegirlturnedupbreathlessly,apaperbagheldtightlyinherhand（.
小女孩拿来一个纸袋，这里开始和
第二段衔接。
此处我简化了很多词，本来写了很多）“Hereyouare.Itwill…doyougood.”Shestammeredin
brokenEnglish,grinningmysteriously（.
这里我抖了一个包袱：
为什么她神秘笑？
这也是为第二段铺垫，这里
brokenEnglish照应文中他们是墨西哥人，mysteriously是包袱）Maybe,itwashertoyshedidn’tneedanylonger.（我的想法）Iwavedtothefamily,seeingthemwalkingacrossthestreethandinhand.（纯粹是为了衔接下一句）
第二段：
Aftertheyleft,IgotintomyJeepandopenedthepaperbagI.nsightcameahamburgeranda
20-dollarbill,towhichanotewasattached（.一般用倒装句来让一个东西出场，包袱解开）Itread,“Iboughtthemwithallmysavings.Goodluck.”（不需要解释，本来我也是写了很多，字数限制，都简化掉了）Asifaboltoflightingstruckme,Igapedingratitudeandmeanwhilefeltastabofguiltformymisunderstandinghergoodwill.（描写我的震惊。
这种描写手法太多了，我用的是比喻，同时用gape动作）Ilookedoutofthewindow
eagerlyonlytofindtheirtruckjustalongside.Whatacoincidence（!
无巧不成书！
这是文学手法）Thelittlegirl
returnedmeasweetsmile,hertinklinglaughterfillingtheair.（这里我想刻画女孩的可爱，我脑子里想到：
她在丛中笑。
为了唤起一种艺术画面的美感，我用银铃笑声）ItwasthefirsttimeIwasnotsickofmycartrouble
butluckyforseeingabeautifulheart（.
照应第一段，突出主题：
美丽的心灵）
2【.基础版】 WhenIwasabouttosaygoodbye,thegirlaskedifI’dhadlunch.Hearingwhatshesaid,Irealized
thatIdidn’thavelunch.Tobehonest,afterworkinghardforseveralhours,Iwassohungry.Feelingabitembarrassed,Ireplied:
“no!
”Thegirlsaidwithasmile,“Comeon!
Joinus.Thesadnwichmadebymymumisdelicious!
”Withmovedtearsrollingaroundmyeyes,Itookthesandwich.Aftereatingitlikeawolf,IfeltthatitwasthemosttastysandwichthatIhadeverhad.Seeingmylooks,theyalllaughed.Thenthegirl’smotherplacedanothersandwichinapaperbagandhandedittome,sayinggently:
“Keepitandhaveitlater!
Wehadtogonow.”
Aftertheyleft,Igotintomyjeepandopenedthepaperbag.Whatsurprisedmealotwasthattherewasasandwichandthebillgivenbyme.Holdingthepaperbagtightly,Istoodstill,awarmcurrentrisinginmyheart.HowgratefulIwastothefamilyhelpingme.AlthoughmostpeopleImetontheroadwereindifferent,therewerestillsomepeoplelikethisfamilywhowassohelpfulandthoughtful.Fromthenon,Iplacedajackandsomecommontoolsinmycar.Whenmeetingpeopleinneedontheroad,Iwouldtrymybesttohelpthemlikethefamily.Onlyinthisway,couldmoreandmorepeoplehelpeachotherinthefuture.
3.【高阶版】 WhenIwasabouttosaygoodbye,thegirlaskedifI’dhadlunch.ItwasthenthatIwasawarethatIdidn’thavelunch.Tobehonest,afterseveralhours’hardwork,mystomachwasgruntingwithhunger.Somewhat
embarrassed,Ireplied:
“no!
”thegirlsaidwithasmile,“Comeon!
Joinus.Thesandwichismymother’sspecialty.”Withmovedtearsrollingaroundmyeyes,Ireachedforthesandwich.Afterdevouringitlikeawolf,IfeltthatitwasthetastysandwichthatIhadeverhad.Seeingmylooks,hteyallburstoutlaughing.Then,thegirl’smother
hadanothersandwichplacedinapaperbagandhandedittome,sayinggently:
“Keepitandhaveitlater!
Wehavetogonow.”
Aftertheyleft,IgotintomyjeepandopenedthepaperbagI.nsidethepaperbagwereansandwichandthebillgivenbyme.Graspingthepaperbag,Iwasrootedtothespot,awarmcurrentrisinginmyheart.HowgratefulIwastothefamilyreachingoutahelpinghandtome.IndifferentasmostofpeopleImetontheroadwere,therewerestillsomepeoplelikethisfamilywhoweresohelpfulandconsiderate.Fromthenon,Iplacedajackandsomecommontoolsinmycar.Whenmeetingpeopleinneedontheroad,Iwouldspareno
effortstohelpthemliketheMexicanfamily.Asthesayinggoes,“Itisablessingtogetlovefromothersandtocareforothersisablessing.”
4.WhenIwasabouttosaygoodbye,thegirlaskedifI'dhadlunchO.verthreehours'delayontheroadmadeitimpossibletolieotherwise,butIdeclinedtheirinvitationtohavesomefoodtogetherwiththem,sayingthatmyparentsIwasonmywaytovisitwouldbewaitingtoolong.Whenthefatherhandedbacktomethe$20bill,IexplaineditwasnotmeantasarewardfortheirhelpbuttopayforthetireiornIhadbroken.Seeingmyfirmness,themotherproducedapaperbagandsaidinsideitwasahamburgerthatIcouldeatwhiledriving,whichIcouldnotbutaccept.
Aftertheyleft,IgotintomyJeepandopenedthepaperbag. Tomysurprise,alongsidewiththehamburger,Ifoundthe$20bill,whichhadsomehowmadeitswayintothebag.Alightcoolbreezewasblowingagainstmyburningfacethroughthewindowofmyjeep;Iwassoashamedofmyself.WhileIwaswaitingforhelpbeforeImetthefamily,Ihatedthisworld,itspeopleandthebadluckithadthrownatme.Thecoolwindofthefallhadmademefeelpiercingcold.Ifyouarepatientenough,youcanalwaysfindwarmthoutthere.Whatmattersistheconfidenceinhumannatureandtheefforttospreadwarmtharound.
5 WhenIwasabouttosaygoodbye,thegirlaskedifI'dhadlunchA.tthatmoment,aweirdsoundcamefrommystomach,tellingthefamilyhowawkwardthelastthreehoursIhadbeenbeforetheyappeared.Iwas,indeed,extremelyhungryandwasalittleembarrassed."Justwait!
"thelittlegirlstoppedme.Sheheadedtothetruckandtookoutapaperbag."You'lllikeit!
"Shehandedittome.Thenwewavedgoodbyewithbestwishestoeachother.
Aftertheyleft,IgotintomyJeepandopenedthepaperbag. It'scandy.Iunwrappedoneandputitintomymouth.SosweetwasitthatIfeltawarmstreamflowinginthedepthofmyheart.Inthefollowing30minutes,Idrovewithabigsmilewearingonmyfacealltheway.Iateupallthecandybutkeptthepaperbag.ItremindedmeofthewarmthfromtheMexicanfamily,andthecandyhadeverlastingtasteinmymemory.
6.WhenIwasabouttosaygoodbyethegirlaskedifI’dhadanylunchI.laughedandsaid:
“IwishthatIhad—I’mfeelingveryhungrynow.”“Wehavelotsoffoodwithusandweregoingtostopsoontohaveourlunch.Hereisasgoodaplaceasanywheretoeatsopleaseeatwithus.”“That’sverygenerousofyou.I’dlovetoacceptyourinvitation,”Ireplied.Weweresoonsittingonablanketnexttothetruckhavingalovelypicnic.Whenwehadfinishedtheyputeverythingaway,wishedmeluckwiththerestofmyjourney,gavemeapaperbagandsetoff.
AftertheyleftIgotintomyjeepandopenedthepaperbagI.nsideIfoundsomefreshfruitandthe$20bill.Now,insteadoffeelingirritatedthatpeoplecouldn’tbebotheredtostopIwasfilledwithasenseofappreciationofhowthoughtfulpeoplecouldbe.IdecidedthatfromthenonIwouldalwaystrytobethoughtfulandhelpfulwheneverIsawpeopleintrouble.
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