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体裁
故事类记叙文
话题
和爸爸去朋友家农场游玩迷路的故事
和父母一块去旅游的故事
朋友一起骑车游玩,野外遇到狼的故事
小两口野外游玩不幸走散,女主人迷路,在野外独自度过夜晚
标示词
名词(词组)
7
6
8
动词(词组)
2
3
形容词、副词
1
其他
考查内容
1.考查考生对故事类文章的理解以及根据原文的内容创作逻辑合理、语义通顺的结尾的能力;
2.考查续写内容的丰富性以及和原文的相符性;
3.考查对所给关键词语的覆盖情况;
4.考查续写的文章中应用的语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性。
考查方式
提供一段350词以内的语言材料,要求考生依据该材料内容、所给段落开头语和所标示关键词语进行续写(150词左右),将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文
分析解读 读后续写是浙江省高考英语科特有的题目,综合了阅读理解和写作。
该题不仅考查考生的语言表述能力,还考查考生对文章的理解能力、对文章结构的把握能力和对情节发展的判断构思能力。
考生只有在对原文准确深刻理解的基础上,对情节的发展做出判断,运用合适的构思能力,才能做出优秀的续写。
因此,读后续写具有较大的难度。
【真题典例】
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
Itwassummer,andmydadwantedtotreatmetoavacationlikeneverbefore.HedecidedtotakemeonatriptotheWildWest.
WetookaplanetoAlbuquerque,abigcityinthestateofNewMexico.WereachedAlbuquerqueinthelateafternoon.UnclePaul,mydad’sfriend,pickedusupfromtheairportanddroveusuptohisfarminPecos.
HiswifeTinacookedusadeliciousdinnerandwegottoknowhissonsRyanandKyle.MydadandIspentthenightintheguestroomofthefarmhouselisteningtothefrogsandwaterrollingdowntherivernearby.Veryearlyinthemorning,UnclePaulwokeusuptohavebreakfast.“Thedaystartsatdawnonmyfarm,”hesaid.Afterbreakfast,IwenttohelpAuntTinafeedthechickens,whilemydadwentwithUnclePaultotakethesheepouttograze(吃草).IwasimpressedtoseemydadandUnclePaulridinghorses.Theylookedreallycool.
Intheafternoon,IaskedUnclePaulifIcouldtakeahorseride,andhesaidyes,aslongasmydadwentwithme.Iwasn’tgoingtotakeahorseridebymyselfanyway.So,mydadandIputonournewcowboyhats,gotonourhorses,andheadedslowlytowardsthemountains.“Don’tbelateforsupper,”UnclePaulcried,“andkeeptothetracksothatyoudon’tgetlost!
”“OK!
”mydadcriedback.AfterawhileUnclePaulandhisfarmhousewereoutofsight.Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetrees,andthelateafternoonsunmixedtocreateamagicscene.Itlookedlikeabeautifulwoven(编织的)blanketspreadoutuponthegroundjustforus.
注意:
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph1:
Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.
Paragraph2:
Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.
原文延续了浙江省读后续写的特点,是一篇故事性很强的记叙文。
文字简单,内容贴近日常生活。
文章第一段交代故事的背景。
介绍了度假的原因和地点。
第二段简单地介绍了旅途。
第三段是对在农场的日常活动的简单介绍。
第四段和续写故事的展开有很大的关系。
这一段讲到了如何发生了我和爸爸去骑马的故事。
而续写的内容就是在此基础上展开。
写作指导
根据续写第一段所给的段首句Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.可知,本段应该主要描写突然出现一只兔子之后的故事。
按照常理,突然出现的兔子一般会让马受惊。
故本段描写马受惊后发生的事比较自然。
从第二段的段首句Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.可以看出作者和父亲迷路了。
那么本段的故事主要根据迷路之后的情况展开,应该是从迷路到回家的故事。
写作时一定要注意以下两点:
第一,从本故事的发展来看,第一段是马受惊后发生的事,而第二段是迷路之后的故事,因此要注意人物心理和情感的描写。
第二,注意两段的逻辑关系。
要注意第一段段首句和原文的逻辑顺畅,以及第一段的内容,尤其是段尾的内容和第二段段首句的逻辑合理,即第一段的最后一定要有迷路的情节设计。
参考范文
Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.Thisunexpectedappearancefrightenedmyhorse,whichmadeitrunwildly.Itriedmybesttocontrolit,butinvain.FrightenedasIwas,Itriedtokeepmybalancetopreventmefromfallingoff.Fortunately,minuteslater,thehorsestoppedbeforeariver,outofbreath,andsodidI.Atthatmoment,mydadalsocameup.SeeingIwasOK,hewasquiterelieved.Butitwasclearthatwegotlost.
Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.Wedidn’tknowwherethefarmhousewas.Whatwecoulddowastogobackalongtheprevioustrackslowly.Butitwasreallydifficultforusinsuchadarksituation.Justaswewereatthepointofdesperation,weheardafaintvoicefromthedistance.“ItmustbeUnclePaul,”Isaid.Sowecriedbackwithexcitement.Finally,UnclePaulsafelybroughtusbackhome.Whatanamazingride!
范文鉴赏
1.范文和原文的逻辑关系紧密,故事紧紧贴近原文的故事发展。
2.续写使用了不少高级的句子结构,如:
FrightenedasIwas...尽管我很害怕……
topreventmefromfallingoff防止我掉下去
...thehorsestoppedbeforeariver,outofbreath,andsodidI.……马在一条小河前停了下来,气喘吁吁,我也如此。
Whatwecoulddowastogobackalongtheprevioustrackslowly.我们能做的就是沿着之前的痕迹慢慢走回去。
3.文章用娴熟的笔法使用了很多精美词汇,如:
previousadj.之前的
invain白费力气
atthepointofdesperation将要绝望之际
afaintvoice微弱的声音
过专题
【五年高考】
Writing1(2017浙江11月)
AVacationwithMyMother
Ihadaninterestingchildhood.Itwasfilledwithsurprisesandamusements,allbecauseofmymother—loving,sweet,yetabsent-mindedandforgetful.OnestrangefamilytripwetookwhenIwaseleventellsalotabouther.
MytwosetsofgrandparentslivedinColoradoandNorthDakota,andmyparentsdecidedtospendafewweeksdrivingtothosestatesandseeingallthesightsalongtheway.Asthefirstdayofourtripapproached,David,myeight-year-oldbrother,andIunwillinglysaidgood-byetoallofourfriends.Whoknewifwe’deverseethemagain?
Finally,themomentofourdeparturearrived,andweloadedsuitcases,books,games,campingequipment,andatentintothecarandbravelydroveoff.Webravelydroveoffagaintwohourslaterafterwe’dreturnedhometogetthepurseandtraveler’schecksMomhadforgotten.
DavidandIwerealwaysalittlenervouswhenusinggasstationbathroomsifMomwasdrivingwhileDadslept:
“Youstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookout(放哨)whileIgo,andI’llstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookoutwhileyougo.”Ihadterriblepicturesinmymind:
“Honey,wherearethekids?
”“What?
!
Oh,Gosh...Ithoughttheywerebeingawfullyquiet.”Wewereneveractuallyleftbehindinastrangecity,butweweren’tabouttotakeanychances.
Onthefourthorfifthnight,wehadtroublefindingahotelwithavacancy.Afterdrivinginvainforsometime,Momsuddenlygotagreatidea:
Whydidn’twefindahousewithalikely-lookingbackyardandaskifwecouldsetuptentthere?
DavidandIbecamenervous.Toourgreatrelief,Dadturneddowntheidea.Momnevercouldunderstandourobjections(反对).Ifastrangefamilyshoweduponherfrontdoorstep,Momwouldhavebeendelighted.Shethinkseveryoneintheworldisasniceassheis.Wefinallyfoundavacancyinthenexttown.
Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.
Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.
答案
【写作提示】
原文是一篇有关家庭旅游生活的故事。
文章内容贴近生活,中学生容易发挥想象去续写。
续写的内容应该还是按照家庭旅游的主线来进行,当然,涉及“妈妈健忘,但是很善良”的特点也是续写的关注点。
【参考范文】
Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.Wedecidedtocampalongtheriver.Theviewsthereweresurprisinglybeautiful—thewarmsunshine,thefreshair,thecleanwater.Wesatonthegrass,enjoyingthesplendidnature.However,whenDadwasabouttoputupourtent,hewasdisappointedtofindthatithadbeenleftinthehotel.Well,Dadhadtogobacktofetchittocontinueourcamping.
Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.Everytimewegottoanewplace,Momwouldcheeruplikeachild.Shewouldgetoffthecarexcitedly,laughinganddancingaround.Togetherweenjoyedthemodernsightsinthebigcities,thehistoricalbuildingsinthesmalltownsandtheamazingsceneryinnature.Whenwecamebacktothehotelafterthetiringbutexcellentvisit,Momwouldhugusandkissusonourfaces.Howsweetshewas!
Absent-mindedandforgetfulasshewas,sheneverforgottoexpressherlovetous.
Writing2(2017浙江6月)
Onabright,warmJulyafternoon,MacHollan,aprimaryschoolteacher,wascyclingfromhishometoAlaskawithhisfriends.Oneofhisfriendshadstoppedtomakeabicyclerepair,buttheyhadencouragedMactocarryon,andtheywouldcatchupwithhimsoon.AsMacpedaled(骑行)alongalone,hethoughtfondlyofhiswifeandtwoyoungdaughtersathome.Hehopedtoshowthemthisbeautifulplacesomeday.
ThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim.“Man,that’sabigdog!
”hethought.Butwhenhelookedtotheside,hesawinstantlythatitwasn’tadogatall,butawolf,quicklycatchingupwithhim.
Mac’sheartjumped.Hefoundouthiscanofbearspray.Withonehandonthebars,hefiredthesprayatthewolf.Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal,andtoMac’srelief,itfellback,shakingitshead.Butaminutelater,itwasbyhissideagain.ThenitattackedthebackofMac’sbike,tearingopenhistentbag.Hefiredatthewolfasecondtime,andagain,itfellbackonlytoquicklyrestartthechase(追赶).
Macwaspedalinghardnow.Hewavedandyelledatpassingcarsbutwascarefulnottoslowdown.Hesawasteepuphillclimbbeforehim.Heknewthatoncehehitthehill,he’dbeeasycaughtupandthewolf’steethwouldbetearingintohisflesh.
Atthismoment,PaulandBeckyweredrivingtheircarontheirwaytoAlaska.Theydidn’tthinkmuchofitwhentheysawtwocyclistsrepairingtheirbikeonthesideoftheroad.Abitlater,theyspottedwhatthey,too,assumedwasadogrunningalongsideamanonabike.Astheygotcloser,theyrealizedthatthedogwasawolf.Macheardalargevehiclebehindhim.Hepulledinfrontofitasthewolfwascatchingupfast,justadozenyardsawaynow.
2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.
Afewminuteslater,theothercyclistsarrived.
【写作提示】
文章题材和野外生活相关,故事具有冒险性。
原文是主人公Mac在和朋友一起外出骑车旅游时不幸遭遇饿狼的故事。
就在最危险的时候Paul和Becky驱车走近。
这样,精彩的故事进一步展开