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Withtheriseandspreadofinternet

Withtheriseandspreadofinternet,peoplescanorsearchforinformationbyuseofcomputermoreoftenthanlookthemupinabook.Thehighusefrequenciesofcomputerseemstotaketheplaceofbooks.Butinmyopinion,theinventionofcomputershaveitsstrongpoints,theycanworktogetherwithotherthings

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Thecomputerandinternetissofastandconvinentwhenyouareinneedofinformation.Youcouldsearchnearlyeverythingontheinternet.Butyoucouldnotbelieveeverthingyoureadorseeonit,someinformationhasnothingtodowiththefact.Asaresult,thecomputersaregoodchoicesforbeingawareofknowledgeandinformation.nowadays,computerbecamemoreandmoreimportentinourlife,howcanweuseitaswellaswecando?

Weshouldsaythateverycoinhasitstwosides,Generallyspeaking,studentswillbenefitalotfromthemifwemakegooduseofthem.

However,thedisadvantagesofcomputer:

A:

radiation,damagetheskinandeyes!

Two:

thecomputernetworkgamecanletapersongetdrunk!

Thisisnotonlyawasteoftime,butalsoawasteofourmoney!

Three:

thecomputerwillmakepeoplebecomedull,letapersondonotwanttothink,letapersonnotwillingtowritebyhandandfriends!

Four:

thecomputerwillmakepeople（35%people）becomeinhuman,patienceandkindness!

Computeroftheadvantagesanddisadvantagesofcurrentsocialscienceandtechnology,computerhascomeintowideuse,almosteveryfamilyhasacomputer.Inthemorden,inventionsareeverywhere.Ithinkthoseareveryuseful.Forexampe,thelightcangivemorelights,wecanspendmoretimetoplayandwork.Andthecomputercanprovidemoreinformationforus,sowoshouldtryourbesttostudysothatwecaninventmorehelpfulinventions.

∙动词错误]语法错误，建议将by+do改为by+doing。

∙[名词错误] ofinternet 冠词缺失  

∙[学习提示]易混词汇:

appearance, look,face,aspect均含事物或人的“外表，容貌”之意。

∙[批改提示] people表示“人，民族”。

查看与person的区别。

∙[批改提示] often的近义表达有frequently。

1.2

Thehighusefrequenciesofcomputerseemstotaketheplaceofbooks.

∙[搭配统计]动名搭配 take...place 在教材中出现过 43 次  

∙[学习提示]易混词汇:

 high,tall,lofty均有“高的”之意。

1.3

Butinmyopinion,theinventionofcomputershaveitsstrongpoints,theycanworktogetherwithotherthings.

∙[拼写错误] strongpoints 拼写错误，可替换选项为：

strongpoints,strong-points,standpoints  

∙[学习提示]易混词汇:

advice, opinion,proposal,suggestion,recommendation,view均含“意见，建议”之意。

∙[批改提示] but的近义表达有nonetheless或nevertheless。

第2段

2.1

Thecomputerandinternetissofastandconvinentwhenyouareinneedofinformation.

∙[语法检查]建议把 Thecomputerandinternetis 改成 Thecomputerandinternetare/Thecomputerorinternetis（SubjectVerbAgreement）  

∙[拼写错误] convinent 拼写错误，可替换选项为：

convenient,Continent,continent  

∙[学习提示]易混词汇:

 fast,quick,rapid,swift,hasty,prompt,speedy,instant都有“快，迅速”之意。

2.2

Youcouldsearchnearlyeverythingontheinternet.

∙[学习提示]易混词汇:

almost, nearly,about,approximately,around,roughly均有“大约，差不多”之意。

2.3

Butyoucouldnotbelieveeverthingyoureadorseeonit,someinformationhasnothingtodowiththefact.

∙[拼写错误] everthing 拼写错误，可替换选项为：

everthing,ever-thing,everything  

∙[学习提示]易混词汇:

 believe,trust,confide,rely均含有“相信，信任”之意。

∙[批改提示] but的近义表达有nonetheless或nevertheless。

2.4

Asaresult,thecomputersaregoodchoicesforbeingawareofknowledgeandinformation.

∙[标点错误]标点与其前面的单词之间 不应该有空格，请检查  

∙[学习提示]易混词汇:

 aware,conscious,sensible均含“意识到的”之意。

2.5

nowadays,computerbecamemoreandmoreimportentinourlife,howcanweuseitaswellaswecando?

∙[句子错误]请注意句首单词首字母大写  

∙[标点错误]标点与其前面的单词之间 不应该有空格，请检查  

∙[名词错误] computer 前面冠词缺失。

∙[拼写错误] importent 拼写错误，可替换选项为：

impotent,important  

∙[批改提示] use...as表示“用...当做”。

注意与use...for的区别。

2.6

Weshouldsaythateverycoinhasitstwosides,Generallyspeaking,studentswillbenefitalotfromthemifwemakegooduseofthem.

∙[搭配统计]动名搭配 benefit...lot 在教材中出现过 36 次  

∙[学习提示]易混词汇:

money,cash, coin,currency均有“金钱”之意。

∙[批改提示] benefit近义表达有help/improve/assist/enhance/serve  

第3段

3.1

However,thedisadvantagesofcomputer:

A:

radiation,damagetheskinandeyes!

∙[句子错误]本句语法不规范，请检查！

∙[标点错误]标点与其前面的单词之间 不应该有空格，请检查  

∙[学习提示]易混词汇:

 skin,leather,fur,hide,peel均含“皮，皮肤”之意。

∙[批改提示]注意damage和harm区别。

3.2

Two:

thecomputernetworkgamecanletapersongetdrunk!

∙[低频警示] thecomputernetworkgame 在语料库中无此用法，疑似中式英语  

∙[学习提示]易混词汇:

athletics,sport, game 均有“体育运动”之意。

注意game和match的区别。

∙[批改提示] person表示“人”。

注意与people的区别。

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3.3

Thisisnotonlyawasteoftime,butalsoawasteofourmoney!

∙[学习提示]易混词汇:

 money,cash,coin,currency均有“金钱”之意。

3.4

Three:

thecomputerwillmakepeoplebecomedull,letapersondonotwanttothink,letapersonnotwillingtowritebyhandandfriends!

∙[句子错误]本句语法不规范，请检查！

∙[学习提示]易混词汇:

 dull,tedious,monotonous,dreary均表示“单调的，乏味的，厌烦的”之意。

∙[批改提示] person表示“人”。

注意与people的区别。

详情点击  

∙[批改提示] people表示“人，民族”。

查看与person的区别。

∙[批改提示] want的近义表达有intend，tend，lack，need。

3.5

Four:

thecomputerwillmakepeople（35%people）becomeinhuman,patienceandkindness!

∙[句子错误]本句语法不规范，请检查！

∙[学习提示]易混词汇:

cruel,brutal, inhuman,savage,barbarous,fierce,ruthless都有“残忍的，野蛮的”之意。

∙[搭配统计]动名搭配 make...people 在教材中出现过 757 次  

∙[批改提示] people表示“人，民族”。

查看与person的区别。

3.6

Suchaswhenweweremiddleschoolandseniorhighschoolstudents,wealwayscheckouttheanswerbyourselvesandtriedourbesttosolovetheproblem.

∙[拼写错误] solove 拼写错误，可替换选项为：

solove,so-love,solve  

∙[搭配统计]动名搭配 check_out...answer 在教材中出现过 4 次  

∙[学习提示]易混词汇:

restrain, check,refrain,bridle,curb,inhibit均含“阻止，抑制，制止”之意。

∙[批改提示] check表示“核对，核实”。

注意与examine的区别。

详情点击  

∙[批改提示] middle表示“中部”。

注意与centre的区别。

详情点击  

3.7

Whileweownedthecomputer,ourmindswereseriousaffectedandwecannotthinkaboutthekeysoquickly.

∙[词语错误]用词不当，建议将cannot改为cannot。

详情点击  

∙[标点错误]标点与其前面的单词之间 不应该有空格，请检查  

∙[搭配统计]动名搭配 puter 在教材中出现过 365 次  

∙[学习提示]易混词汇:

 affect,influence,impress均含“影响”之意。

第4段

4.1

Computeroftheadvantagesanddisadvantagesofcurrentsocialscienceandtechnology,computerhascomeintowideuse,almosteveryfamilyhasacomputer.

∙[名词错误] computer 前面冠词缺失。

∙[搭配统计]动名搭配 puter 在教材中出现过 1653 次  

∙[学习提示]易混词汇:

 advantage,benefit,interest,favour,profit,gain均有“利益，好处”之意。

∙[批改提示] wide表示具体的宽度，广阔度，注意与widely区别。

详情点击  

∙[批改提示] technology表示“工艺，技术”。

注意与technique的区别。

详情点击  

4.2

Inthemorden,inventionsareeverywhere.

∙[标点错误]标点与其前面的单词之间 不应该有空格，请检查  

∙[拼写错误] morden 拼写错误，可替换选项为：

Morten,modern,midden  

4.3

Ithinkthoseareveryuseful.

∙[学习提示]易混词汇:

consider, think,believe,count,deem,reckon,regard均含有“认为”之意。

∙[批改提示]此句型用的太过频繁，建议改为sb.suppose/claim+从句.  

∙[批改提示] very的近义表达有extremely,exceedingly,remarkably,intensely。

4.4

Forexampe,thelightcangivemorelights,wecanspendmoretimetoplayandwork.

∙[标点错误]标点与其前面的单词之间 不应该有空格，请检查  

∙[动词错误]语法错误，建议将spendsthto+do改为spendsth+doing/in+doing。

∙[拼写错误] exampe 拼写错误，可替换选项为：

example,exam,examine  

∙[学习提示]易混词汇:

 give,accord,award,confer，grant,endow,present,bestow均含有“给予，赠给”之意。

4.5

Andthecomputercanprovidemoreinformationforus,sowoshouldtryourbesttostudysothatwecaninventmorehelpfulinventions.

∙[低频警示] helpful...invention 在语料库中无此用法，疑似中式英语  

∙[拼写错误]拼写不规范，建议将wo改为we。

∙[搭配错误] invent...invention 动宾搭配不地道  

∙[标点错误]标点与其前面的单词之间 不应该有空格，请检查  

∙[搭配统计]动名搭配 provide...information 在教材中出现过 6554 次  

Exposition

Withtheriseandspreadofinternet,peoplescanorsearchforinformationbyusingofcomputermoreoftenthanlookthemupinabook. Thehighusefrequenciesofcomputerseemstotaketheplaceofbooks. Butinmyopinion,theinventionofcomputershaveitsstrongpoints,theycanworktogetherwithotherthings.

Thecomputerandinternetissofastandconvinentwhenyouareinneedofinformation. Youcouldsearchnearlyeverythingontheinternet. Nowadays,computerbecamemoreandmoreimportentinourlife,howcanweuseitaswellaswecando?

 Weshouldsaythateverycoinhasitstwosides,Generallyspeaking,studentswillbenefitalotfromthemifwemakegooduseofthem.

Wecanmakesomereadingplan,weonlyneedfivetotenminutesontheInternetcanreadagoodarticle,andcompletetheexercises. Andsoon,daysandmonthsmultiplying,ourlevelofChineselanguagewillbegreatlyimproved. Ifyoudonotencounterinmyplace,aslongastheInternet,willhelptosolvethepuzzle. However,thecomputeralsobringsgreatharmtous. Thecomputerwillaffectourvision,ifwelookatsuchlongtimecomputerscreen,nottolettheeyesforproperrest,itwillaffectourvision,causedbyshort-sighted,moreseriousmayleadto"dryeye". Itwillalsoaffectourstudy,ifwearetooobsessedwithonlinegamesand"ICQ",theacademicdisregarded,academicachievementandthusfell,eventhedesiretolearn. However,themostseriousistheimpactofthecommunicationbetweenpeople,becausethecomputerisnotconvenient,aslongaspeopleusetheInternettotransferinformationbetweeneachother,evenconnectthetelephonetimeisalsoreduced;thelongrun,thesocietywillbecomeindifferent,diaphragmbetweenpeoplewillbemoreandmoreterrible.

However,thedisadvantagesofcomputer:

A:

radiation,damagetheskinandeyes!

 Two:

thecomputernetworkgamecanletapersongetdrunk!

 Thisisnotonlyawasteoftime,butalsoawasteofourmoney!

 Three:

thecomputerwillmakepeoplebecomedull,letapersondonotwanttothink,letapersonnotwillingtowritebyhandandfriends!

 Four:

thecomputerwillmakepeople（35%people）becomeinhuman,patienceandkindness!

 Suchaswhenweweremiddleschoolandseniorhighschoolstudents,wealwayscheckouttheanswerbyourselvesandtriedourb