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Thereisnodoubtthathelpingstudentsfindajobisoneoftheprimaryfunctionsofuniversityeducation，butuniversitiesdoexistforotherpurposessuchasimprovingstudents’analyticalskillsandraisingstudents’moralstandards.

　　Auniversityeducationcanbeseenasaprocessofimprovingstudents’analyticalthinking.Thevarietyofcoursesofferedatuniversityinspiresstudentsinvariousways，thereforeimprovingtheiranalyticalability.Forexample，sciencecoursessuchasmathandbiologyhelpstudentsdeveloparationalwayofthinkingwhereasartscoursessuchasliterature123vetoletstudentsponderoverissuesfromalogical，multi-dimensionalperspective;andcoursesinsocialsciencesforcestudentstorecognizetheideasthathavebeentraditionallyassumedtobeacceptableandunproblematic.Withthedevelopmentofthesetypesofanalyticalthinking，graduatescanfacefuturechallengeswithmoreconfidenceandenthusiasm.

　　Also，universityeducationisexpectedtoimprovestudents’moralstandards.Thisisrootedinuniversities’beliefthatstudents’awar123ssofresponsibilitytowardstheircommunityandtheircountryisofhighimportance.Inthisever-deg123ratingsocietyandcivilization，studentsareencouragedactivelyparticipateinimprovingthelocalcommunity.Auniversitythatprovidescareandfacilitiesforphysicallydisadvantagedstudentsmayinspirethegraduatestobetterhandlesituationsinthefuturewheretheymayhavetointeractwiththedisabledcommunity.Asuccessfuluniversityeducationissupposedtoproducemorallysoundgraduates，thereforeincreasingtheiremployability.

Inconclusion，universityeducationnotonlyhelpsstudentslocateadecentjobbutwillalsodevelopotherqualitiessuchasenhancingtheiranalyticalskillsandcultivatingtheirhungerandspiritforlife.

Somepeoplewarnthattheeraofthesilverscreeniscomingtoanendandthatpeoplewilleventuallyloseinterestingoingtothecinema.

Doyouagreeordisagreewiththisview?

（250words）

wilight2:

NewMooncouldbecomethemostsuccessfulblockbusterinmoviehistory.Despitethemoviehasmademorethan2,000millionUSdollarsovertheweek,manystillbelievemovieindustryisforsuretofadeoutfrompeople’sentertainmentlife.Personally,Ifoundithardtosidewiththepessimists.

Undoubtedly,themagicofsilverscreenisnolongerthatfascinatingasbefore.Onemajorreasontodrawpeopleawayfromcinemaistheevolutionofhomeentertainment.Sincetechnologycanalmostrecreatesimilaraudio-visualexperiencerightinyourlivingroom,manyhaveturnedtotheircouchandpopcorn.Therecouldnotbeabetterexamplethantheboomingofvideostoresworldwide.Theysprungupeverywherearoundresidentialareasandhadwonmanypeople’sfavor.

Thoughcinemamightbefacingcrucialchallengebyotherformsofentertainment,itistoorecklesstospellitsend.Thesilverscreenstillattractspeopleasauniqueexperience.Goingtocinemaismoreaformofsocialactivities,therefore,manypeoplestillprefersuchopportunities,notonlytoseeabrilliantmovie,buthaveagoodtimewithfamiliesorfriendsaswell.ManymajorCineplexhavealreadylauncheddiversefamilycouponsasamarketinggesture.Thiscanshowhowcinemacanadoptandadaptinthischangingenvironment.

Cinemasalsoconsolidateitsstatusbyalwaysprovidingthelatestmovie.WithmostproducingcompaniestendtoreleaseDVDawhileafterthemovie,hence,formanymoviefanatic,cinemaisalwaystheirfirstchoice.TheTwilight2moviecanmakesuchakillingisjusttheperfectwaytoshowtheadvantagesofcinemaoverDVD.

Inconclusion,Iagreecinemasarefacingextremecompetitioninmoderntime.However,Idonotthinkitwouldbebleachedawayinpeople’slife.Beingawareofthechallenge,cinemascanalsosurpriseuswithnewelements.

owhatextentdoyouagreeordisagree?

Nowadays,therearelotsofadvertisementsontelevisionoronthestreets.Sompeoplethinkthattheadvertsingbooststhesalesofgoodsanditencouragespeopletobuythingsunnecessarily.Thisargumentsmaybetrueinmycountry,manyadvertisingcompaniesproduceadvertisementswithfamousandpopularactorsorsingers.People,especiallyyoungsters,buygoodsthattheirfavouritesingeradvertise,althoughtheydonotreallyneedtheproducts.

Also,onthetelevisionscreen,aproductmaylookgorgeousandgoodquality.Asaresultofit,peopleoftenbuygoodswithoutenoughconsideration.Consumersmaynotactuallyneeditbuttheybuygoodsimpulsivelysoonaftertheywatchtheadvertising.Furthermore,asmanycustomersbuyaparticularproductduetoitsadvertisingcampaign,theotherpeoplemaybeaffectedbythetrend,eveniftheproductisnotoftherealneedsofthesociety.

Ontheotherhand,therearevairousaspectsagainstthesearguments.Moreover,itispeople'schoicetomakeadecisiontobuygoods.Advertisingmaybenotacauseofcustomers'buyinghabits.Individualshavetheirownspendinghabits.Iftheyhavegotenoughdisposableincome,thentherighttomakeadecisionisgiventothem.Nooneactuallycanjudgewhetherthegoodssoldaretherealneedsofthesocietyornot.

Inaddition,asthereshouldbealimitedamountofdisposableincomeconsumersareabletospend,peopletrytoallocatetheirbudgets.Theycannotbesimplyswayedbythoseadvertisements.

Inconclsuion,ascustomershavetheirownstrongopinionsandstandadofgoodqualitygoods,itisbettertoleavethemtomaketheirowndecisioninbuygoods.Itisfairlydifficulttosayeveryoneisswayedbyadvertisingandbuygoodimpulsively.However,insensitiveareaofbusinessessuchastoyindustries,itmaybenecessarytobandadvertisingtothosechildrenaschildrenhavenotgotenoughabilitytocontrolthemselvesortoknowwhattheyneed.（332words）

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Thewayinwhichthecandidatehasrespondedtothetaskisastrongpointofthisscript.Itisawell-developedanswerthataddressestheissuesrelevantlyandatlength.Thewriterintroducesthetopic,examinesbothsidesoftheargumentandexpressesaclearposition.Pointsarewell-arguedandsupportedwithexamples.

Theansweriswell-organisedandthemessageiseasytofollowwithclearparagraphingandlinkingofideas.Therearetoomanyerrosincohesion,however,andsomelinkersarenotalwaysfullyappropriate,sothislimitstheratingforthiscriterion.

Awiderangeofvocabularyisusedaccuratelyandprecisely,inspiteofoneortwoawkwardexpressionsandsomerareerrors.Similarly,asophisticatedrangeofstructuresisusedbuttherearetoomanyminorerrorsandomissions（suchasintheuseofprepositionsandbasicsubjedct/verbagreement）toreachBand8.Neverthelessthesemistakesdonotreducetheclarityoftheanswerandoverallawiderangeoflanguageisusedwithahighlevelofproficiency.

Ariseintheworld’spopulationishavingserious,negativeeffectsontheenvironment.SomescientistsbelievethattheonlywaytosolvetheproblemistosetupacolonyontheMoon.Othersarguethatthecostwouldbefartoogreatandothersolutionsshouldbesought.

Whatisyouropinion?

Theenvironmentis,ofcourse,underseriousthreat,buttheextenttowhichpopulationgrowthisresponsiblemaynotbeasgreatassomepeopleclaim.Infacttherearemanyotherfactorssuchasthegrowthinbigcities,pollutionfromtrafficandmanufacturing,andthedestructionofrainforestthatprobablyplayabiggerrole.Itisquestionable,therefore,howfaracolonyontheMoonwouldhelpsolvetheproblem.

OneofthemostseriousthreatstotheglobalecosystemisthedestructionoftherainforestswithanareathesizeofEuropedisappearingeveryyear.Andthisislargelyduetolargecompaniesintheirpursuitofprofit.Indeed,whilstinternationalloggingcompaniesclaimtouseonaverage10percentofthespeciesoftreesthatmakeuptherainforest,that10percentofspeciesconstituteabout90percentofthevolume.

Naturally,iftheworld’spopulationwasnotaslarge,thedemandforwoodwouldbeconsiderablyreduced,whichwouldsupportsettingupacolonyontheMoon.Butevenifthecolonywassetuphowmanypeopleinreality,wouldrelocate?

Evenifthenumberranintotensofthousandstheactualeffectontheworld’spopulationwouldbeminimal.Indeed,weonlyneedtoconsiderhowmanypeoplewerekilledduringthetwoworldwars,whichranintomillions,tosupportthisclaim.Instead,thecostshouldbetransferredintothedevelopmentofsustainableeconomies.

Take,forinstance,thegrowthofbigcitiesthatconsumelandatanenormousrate,andthatrelyontransportandessentialservicesthatdevastatetheenvironment.Ifpeopleweretoreverttolivinginsmallsemiself-containedcommunities,manyoftheproblemsexperiencedbybigcitiescouldbeavoided.Itwouldevenbebeneficialfortheeconomybecauseitwouldpromotethedevelopmentofsmall,familyrunbusinesses.

Attheendoftheday,toclaimthatsettingupacolonyontheMoonwouldhelptosolvetheissueofenvironmentaldamageistocloseoureyestothecausesofthedamage.Inshort,itcouldpotentiallyturnouttobeaverycostlyexercisewithfewrealbenefits.（364words）

Step1:

首先确定本文的subject（主体，即topic讨论的对象）－Thepracticeofincludinginternationalnewsintothesubjectsofsecondaryschools.

Step2:

构思所有能够想到的subject的prosandcons（优点和缺点）

Pros:

让中学生上国际新闻这门课有什么好处呢？

一般应该马上会想到通过观看国际新闻，聆听专家关于国际时事的看法可以开拓学生的眼界，并有利于提高他们透过现象认识事件本质的分析能力（即我上课讲的分论点四大黄金原则当中的“能力原则”）。

关键词：

widenone'shorizon,analysingability

Cons:

这种做法可能会带来什么问题呢？

首先马上想到分论点四大黄金原则当中的“因小失大”原则在这种青少年教育类的话题当中一定可以