研究生学术英语写作教程Unit 10Submitting Paper.docx

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研究生学术英语写作教程Unit10SubmittingPaper

UnitTenSubmittingPaper

Objectives

-Knowthepaperprocessingprocedures

-Becomeawareofpolitenessinletterwriting

-Writeasubmissioncoverletterandreplytothedecisionletter

Contents

-Readinganddiscussion:

Asubmissioncoverletterandadecisionletter.

-Languagefocus:

politeness

-Writingpractice:

submissioncoverletter;replytoadecisionletter;inquiryletter

1.ReadingActivity

Yourresearchpaperisfinished.Thenextstepistosubmitthepapertoasuitableacademicjournal.Thisunitaimstoshowyouthereviewprocedure,hopefullybringyouanawarenessoftwolanguagefeaturesofacademicwriting,andfinallyhelpyoucorrespondwiththeedit-in-chiefonyourown.

1.1Pre-readingTask

Beforeyoulearnthedetailedinformation,pleasediscussthefollowingquestions.

Whatshouldyouconsideraboutthejournalyouaregoingtosubmitthepaperto?

Whatshouldyoudotoyourpaperbeforesubmission?

WhatshouldbeincludedinyoursubmissionE-mail?

Howcanwesoundpolitewhenwewritethesubmissioncoverletterandreplytothedecisionletter?

1.2ReadingPassages

Letter1--Asubmissioncoverletter

DearDr.JamesJoyce,

Thisisamanuscriptentitled"ANOVELROOT-ENDFILLINGMATERIALBASEDONHYDROXYAPATITE,TETRACALCIUMPHOSPHATEANDPOLYACRYLICACID"byLingHuchongandQiaoFengfromStateKeyLaboratoryofBioelectronics,SchoolofBiologicalScienceandMedicalEngineering,SoutheastUniversity,Nanjing,China.Itissubmittedtobeconsideredforpublicationasan"OriginalArticle"inyourjournal.

Noconflictofinterestexitsinthesubmissionofthismanuscript,andmanuscriptisapprovedbyallauthorsforpublication.Iwouldliketodeclareonbehalfofmyco-authorsthattheworkdescribedwasoriginalresearchthathasnotbeenpublishedpreviously,andnotunderconsiderationforpublicationelsewhere,inwholeorinpart.

Inthiswork,wedevelopedanovelfillingmaterialhydroxyapatite/tetracalciumphosphate/polyacrylicacidcement（HA/TTCP/PAA）,andfurtherexamineditschemicalcomposition,physicalpropertiesandcytotoxicityincomparisonwithglassionomercement（GIC）andPortlandcement（PC）.Ihopethispaperissuitablefor“INTERNATIONALENDODONTICJOURNAL”.

Thefollowingisalistofpossiblereviewersforyourconsideration:

1）ProfessorDuanYuE-mail:

duanyu@

2）ProfessorShiTaiE-mail:

shitai@

Wedeeplyappreciateyourconsiderationofourmanuscript,andwelookforwardtoreceivingcommentsfromthereviewers.Ifyouhaveanyqueries,pleasedon’thesitatetocontactmeattheaddressbelow.

Enclosedpleasefindthepaper.

Thankyouandbestregards.

Yourssincerely,

LingHuchong

Correspondingauthor:

Prof.Dr.QiaoFeng

StateKeyLaboratoryofBioelectronics

SchoolofBiologicalScienceandMedicalEngineering

SoutheastUniversity

Nanjing210096

P.R.China

Tel:

（+8625）12345678

Fax:

（+8625）12345678

E-mail:

qiaofeng@

1.3ReadingComprehension

1.3.1Listthecontentsthatshouldbeincludedinletter1.

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Letter2----Adecisionletter

From:

iejeditor@cardiff.ac.uk

To:

QiaoFeng@

CC:

LingHuchong@

Subject:

ManuscriptIDIEJ-12-00123,InternationalEndodonticJournal

Body:

DearDr.Qiao,

ManuscriptID:

IEJ-12-00123

ManuscriptTitle:

Hydroxyapatite/TetracalciumPhosphate/PolyacrylicAcidCement:

Chemical-PhysicalPropertiesandCytotoxicity

Ihavereceivedthecommentsofthereferees（s）anddecidedthatyourmanuscriptrequiresmajorchangesandthengothroughtherefereeingprocessagain.However,pleasenotethatresubmittingyourmanuscriptdoesnotguaranteeeventualacceptance.

Shouldyouwishtoreviseandresubmityourmanuscript,pleasereviseyourpapertakingintoaccountanypointstheyhaveraised-theircommentscanbefoundattheendofthisemail.AlsodoublecheckthatinthebodyofthetextandintheReferencesectionthenamesofauthorsarespeltcorrectlyincludinganynon-Englishcharacterswhereappropriate.

Youwillbeunabletomakeyourrevisionsonlineusingtheoriginallysubmittedversionofthemanuscript.Instead,reviseyourmanuscriptonyourPC/MACusingyourwordprocessingprogrammeandsaveitonyourcomputer.Pleasehighlightthechangestoyourmanuscriptwithinthedocumentbyusingthe"trackchanges"modeinMSWordorequivalent.

Touploadyourrevisedmanuscript,logontoandenteryourAuthorCentre,whereyouwillfindyouroriginalmanuscripttitlelistedunder"ManuscriptswithDecisions".Under"Actions,"clickon"CreateaRevision".Yourmanuscriptnumberhasbeenappendedtodenotearevision.

Whensubmittingyourrevisedmanuscript,youwillbeabletorespondtothecommentsmadebythereferees（s）inthespaceprovided.Youcanusethisspacetodocumentanychangesyouhavemadetotheoriginalmanuscript.Pleasebeasspecificaspossibleinyourresponsetothereferee（s）.

Ilookforwardtoreceivingyourrevisedmanuscript.

Kindregards

PaulDummer

Editor-in-Chief,InternationalEndodonticJournal

iejeditor@cardiff.ac.uk

Editorcommentstoauthors:

Editor

CommentstotheAuthor:

（Therearenocomments.）

Referee（s）commentstoauthors:

Referee:

1

CommentstoAuthor

Title:

Hydroxyapatite/TetracalciumPhosphate/PolyacrylicAcidCement:

Chemical-PhysicalPropertiesandCytotoxicity

Thismanuscriptintroducesthereadertoanewretrogradefillingmaterialanddescribestheteststhatwereconductedandthecomparisontocurrentlyusedmaterials.

ThesectionDiscussionwaswelldoneanddiscussedtherelevanceofeachtesttopublishedresearchaswellasrelevantclinicalapplications.

Itwouldbehelpfulifthetitlewouldreflectthatthisreportisonarootendfillingmaterial.

Generalcomment.TheentiremanuscriptneedstobeeditedforproperuseoftheEnglishlanguageandsyntax.

Introduction

Thesentence:

“However,itsdefectsprohibitclinicalapplications…..”.Theword“defect”isanoddchoice.“shortcomings”wouldbemoreappropriate.

Thesentence:

“Toovercomethesedisadvantages,anewmaterial,hydroxyapatite/tetracalcium

phosphate/polyacrylicacidcement（HA/TTCP/PAA）,withoptimumproperties,hasbeendeveloped.”

AuthorsyouarereportingonyourfindingsofyournovelcementbutalreadyconcludeinthisIntroductionthatithas“optimumproperties”.Atbestyoucanstatethatitwasyourintenttodevelopamaterialwithoptimumorimprovedproperties.

Authors:

Checkinstructionsforauthorsfortherequiredjournalformatforreferringtothepublishedliterature.

MaterialsandMethods

Thesentence:

“TheHA/TTCP/PAApastewasmixed….andthemixedwithdistilledwater…”Authors,afteryouhavecrushedthepowdersitmakesnosensetodescribetheHA/TTCP/PAAasapaste.

“ThepasteofHA/TTCP/PAA,GICandGPCwereplacedintoaplasticplate…37°Cin100%”Authors,usebetterdescriptionthan“plasticplate”.

“Thefinalsettingtimewastheaverageresultoffivesamplespecimens.”Thewordssampleandspecimensaresynonymous.

“Compressivestrengthwascalculatedfromthemeanvalueoffivesamplesofeachgroup”.Youprobablymeantosaythatthemeanvalueforeachgroupwasderivedfromthe5samples.

“Thematerialsweresetinthemoldsfor24hat37°Cin100%humidity”.Themeaningthematerialsweresetisnotclear.Pleaseexplainthismethodbetter.

“TheHA/TTCP/PAA,GICandGPCpastesweremanuallyshapedseparatelyintoan8mmdiameterballwithin1min….”Authors,itwouldbebettertodescribethisasfollows:

Atstandardliquid/powderratioseachmaterialwasmixedandimmediately,butwithin1min,manipulatedintoaball.

Althoughthetestthatwasdescribedlacksanyscientificfoundation,thefigureswereconvincing.

“Theunreactivesupernatantsinthewellwerecarefullysuckedoff,and600μL….”Authors,useabetterwordthan“suckedoff”toremovethesupernatants.

Washoutresistancetest

“ThewashoutresistanceresultfortheHA/TTCP/PAAshowednonoticeabledisintegration（figure4）;however,GICpasteballshadalargeamountofdebris…”Replacetheword“debris”.TheactualreleaseofparticlesordissolutionoftheGICcannotbecalleddebris.

“DifferentfromHA/TTCP/PAA,GICwaswatersensitiveduringsettingphase,whichwassupportedinthepresentstudybyalargesumofdebrisarounditspasteballinPBS,andsuggestedinEarlandIbbetson’sstudybyitseasydamageintheearlymoistsetting（Bodrumlu2008）”.ThisreviewerdoesnotunderstandtheconnectionbetweenEarlandIbbetson’sstudyandthereferencemadetoBodrumlu.Pleaseclarify.

Thefigureshavenonumbers.Seepages19-23ofthepdf.

Referee:

2

CommentstoAuthor

March24,2012

Title:

Hydroxyapatite/TetracalciumPhosphate/PolyacrylicAcidCement:

Chemical-PhysicalPropertiesandCytotoxicity

Ms.#:

IEJ-12-00-00123

GENERALCONSIDERATIONS:

Writing:

Worduseandgrammarareatjournalstandardsandneedtobeimprovedthroughout.

Organization:

Good

Other:

Avoidtheuseof+/-toexpressvariation.Thepreferredmethodismean（stdev）.Forexample:

11.0（0.8）min.Thediscussionistoolongandover-zealousrelativetotheexperimentaldata（seespecificsbelow）.

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