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老外写的英文综述文章的审稿意见
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Thisworkproposesanextensivereviewonmicromulsion-basedmethodsforthesynthesisofAgnanoparticles.Assuch,thematterisofinterest,howeverthepapersuffersfortwoseriouslimits:
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theoverallqualityoftheEnglishlanguageisratherpoor;
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Oncetheaboveconcernsarefullyaddressed,themanuscriptcouldbeacceptedforpublicationinthisjournal
这是一篇全过程我均比较了解的投稿，稿件的内容我认为是相当不错的，中文版投稿于业内有较高影响的某核心期刊，并很快得到发表。
其时我作为审稿人之一，除了提出一些修改建议外，还特建议了5篇应增加的参考文献，该文正式发表时共计有参考文献25篇。
作者或许看到审稿意见还不错，因此决意尝试向美国某学会主办的一份英文刊投稿。
几经修改和补充后，请一位英文“功底"
较好的中国人翻译，投稿后约3周，便返回了三份审稿意见。
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OurJPCApaperwerepeerreviewedbytworeviewers,andtheircommentsareasfollows:
TheCommentsbytheFirstReviewer
Editor:
MichaelA.Duncan
Reviewer:
68
ManuscriptNumber:
jp067440i
ManuscriptTitle:
RestrictedGeometryOptimization,aDifferentWaytoEstimateStabilizationEnergiesforAromaticMoleculesofVariousTypes
CorrespondingAuthor:
Yu
Recommendation:
Thepaperisprobablypublishable,butshouldbereviewedagaininrevisedformbeforeitisaccepted.
AdditionalComments:
Inthepresentworktheauthorsintroduceanewenergy-basedaromaticitymeasure.Referredasrestrictedgeometryoptimization,theextrastabilizationenergy（ESE）iscalculatedbymeansofanenergyschemeinwhichthedifferentdoublebondsarelocalized.Thismethodologyisappliedtodifferentsetsofaromaticsystems,andtheresultsarecomparedtopreviousalreadyexistingschemes.Thisprocedureseemstoworkbetterthanpreviousones,howeveritmustbeunderlinedthatwithamuchgreatercomplexity.Itavoidshavingtochooseareferencestructure,anditisworthnoticingthatbenzeneappearstobethemostaromaticsystem.Thusthemethodpresentedmightmeananewcontributiontothedifferentaromacitycriteria,howeverbeforeacceptanceforpublicationIwouldrecommendimportantchangestobetakenintoaccountinthemanuscript.
Thenewmethodusedisnotpresentedinacomprehensibleway.InthesecondparagraphoftheIntroductiontheauthorsshouldalreadydescribeit,andnotfirstpresentingtheresultsforbenzeneandnotgoingintothemethodtillthesecondsection.Theformulasusedmustbedescribedpreciselyaswell.SoIwouldrecommendthatbeforeacceptancethemanuscriptshouldberewritteninordertomakeitmorecomprehensiblenotonlytophysicalchemistsbutalsototheexperimentalchemicalcommunity,andatthesametimetoimprovetheEnglishused.
Otherminorpointsare:
-FirstlineofIntroduction:
aromaticityisoneofthemostimportantconceptsinorganicchemistry,butmostoforganiccompoundsarenotaromatic.-Introduction,line4:
noticethatonlyenergeticwaysofevaluatingaromaticityarementioned,howevergeometry-based（HOMA）,magnetic-based（NICS）andelectronic-based（SCI,PDI）methodsarealsoimportant,andthispointshouldbepointedout.
-Section3.1,lastlineoffirstparagraph:
isB3LYPchosenjustbecauseitgivessimilarresultstoHFandMP2?
Thisshouldbepointedoutinthemanuscript.
-Enlargedescriptioninpoint3.4.1bygoingdeeperintothedatainFigure8.
ReviewSentDate:
18-Dec-2006
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TheCommentsbythe
SecondReviewer
67
RestrictedGeometryOptimization,aDifferentWaytoEstimateStabilization
EnergiesforAromaticMoleculesofVariousTypes
Commentsonthemanuscript"
RestrictedGeometryOptimization,aDifferentWaytoEstimateStabilizationEnergiesforAromaticMoleculesofVariousTypes"
byZhong-HengYu,PengBao
Authorsproposearestrictedgeometryoptimizationtechniquesubjecttopiorbitalinteractionconstraintsasanewmeasureofaromaticity.Theapproachisinterestingandhascertainmerits.Mymainobjectionisthatthemanuscriptisdifficulttoreadandunderstand,mainlybecauseofpoorEnglish.Asubstantialrevisioninthisrespectwouldbebeneficiary.
各位：
新的恶战开始了。
投往JASA的文章没有被拒，但被批得很凶。
尽管如此，审稿人和编辑
还是给了我们一个修改和再被审的机会。
我们应当珍惜这个机会，不急不火。
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大家先看看审稿意见吧。
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